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Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and Import food as little as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.3

Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and Import food as little as possible. v. 3
As food production has become much-discussed issue, it is often said that government is supposed to spur local food productions to meet society’s eating needs and limit imported foods. I personally agree with the given statement, and explained more in this essay will the reasons be. Perhaps, the primary reason is that to produce foods through local food companies could bring huge profit, particularly in a state having several agricultural industries, such as Indonesia, which could enhance the local agricultural productivity. As a result, it could lead prosperity to some local farmers, and could subsequently grow the national economic. Additionally, it is important for government to lessen imported foods, since it is undeniable fact that such foods are more affordable compared to the local foods. Thus, it would reduce the interest and sales of the local products. Of course, this condition will be an irony for the national economic circumstances. In addition, regarding the detrimental effect of importing foods, in particular imported fruits. Such fruits would likely harm the inhabitants' body, owing to the artificial preservatives involved. Because, this substance is used by importers in order to keep fruits fresh, as transporting food requires a long time to the targeted country. It is widely accepted that importing foods could help a state in which people are facing certain foods shortage, which is impossible for them to produce their own foods. However, such drawback could be overcome by yielding the main crops suitable for the condition of that country. Overall, it seems to me that to encourage local food productions and to limit imported foods deserve implementing due to the advantages that a country may gain, ranging from creating prosperity for local producers, increasing national economic growth, becoming a domestic market more competitive, to avoiding some harmful imported foods.
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production has become much-discussed issue, it is
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often
said that
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government
is supposed
to spur
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local
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food
productions to
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meet
society’s eating needs and limit
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imported
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foods
. I
personally
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agree
with the
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statement, and
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explained
more in this essay will the reasons be.

Perhaps, the primary reason is that to produce
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foods
through
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local
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food
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companies
could bring huge profit,
particularly
in a state having several agricultural industries, such as Indonesia, which could enhance the
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local
agricultural productivity.
As a result
, it could lead prosperity to
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some
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local
farmers, and could
subsequently
grow the national economic.
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, it is
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important
for
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government
to lessen
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imported
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foods
, since it is undeniable fact that such
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foods
are more affordable compared to the
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local
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foods
.
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, it would
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reduce
the interest and sales of the
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local
products.
Of course
, this condition will be an irony for the national economic circumstances.
In addition
, regarding the detrimental effect of importing
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foods
,
in particular
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imported
fruits. Such fruits would likely harm the
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used
by importers in order to
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fruits fresh, as transporting
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food
requires a long time to the targeted country.

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widely
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accepted
that importing
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could
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help
a state in which
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people
are facing certain
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foods
shortage, which is impossible for them to produce their
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own
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foods
.
However
, such drawback could
be overcome
by yielding the main crops suitable for the condition of that country.

Overall
, it seems to me that to encourage
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local
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food
productions and to limit
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imported
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foods
deserve implementing due to the advantages that a country may gain, ranging from creating prosperity for
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local
producers, increasing national economic growth, becoming a domestic market more competitive, to avoiding
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some
harmful
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imported
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foods
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people believe that countries should produce food for all population eats and Import food as little as possible. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
298 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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