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Many people assume taht the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disargree that constantly increasing production is an approriate goal? v.1

Many people assume taht the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. v. 1
Governments can only provide a limited range of services for citizens. Certain types of services, however, must be provided by governments, whereas both governments and private groups or individuals can share the responsibility to provide other services. A government must provide those services which are essential to a country. These include defence capabilities and-social security. Private enterprise and the profit motive should not form part of these essential services. On the other hand, some services could be provided by either governments or private groups or both. Education and health care are examples of such services. A government must provide at least a basic level of education and health care so all citizens can have access to them. Private enterprise, though, could also provide services in these areas for those who wish to pay for them. Urban infrastructure is another area where governments and private groups or individuals can share the responsibility. Governments must build and maintain a system of roads, but toll roads can be built and road maintenance carried out by private contractors. Similarly, other infrastructure, such as water or electricity supply, can be operated by private companies. To sum up, there are some services, such as defence and social security, which must be provided by government. Other services, for example water supply or education, could be provided by both government and private enterprise. Consequently, it is not true to say that a government’s role is only to provide some services while others should be provided by the private sector. In fact, both government and private groups can share in the provision of most services.
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a limited range of
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for citizens. Certain types of
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services
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groups
or individuals can share the responsibility to
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other
services.

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those
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which are essential to a country. These include
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defence
capabilities and-social security.
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enterprise and the profit motive should not form part of these essential
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. On the
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hand,
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or both. Education and health care are examples of such
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at least a basic level of education and health care
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all citizens can have access to them.
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enterprise, though, could
also
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in these areas for those who wish to pay for them.

Urban infrastructure is another area where
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and
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private
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or individuals can share the responsibility.
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build and maintain a system of roads,
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toll roads can
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and road maintenance carried out by
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contractors.
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infrastructure, such as water or electricity supply, can
be operated
by
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companies
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To sum up, there are
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, such as
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defence
and social security, which
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.
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for example
water supply or education, could be
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by both
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and
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private
enterprise.
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, it is not true to say that a
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government’s
role is
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only
to
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provide
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services
while others should be
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by the
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private
sector. In fact, both
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government
and
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private
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groups
can share in the provision of most
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services
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people assume taht the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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