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You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. Say where you are goingDescribe your houseExplain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house v.1

You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. Say where you are goingDescribe your houseExplain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house v. 1
People, for the time being, frequently use the World Wide Web and rarely communicate with each other; however, overall I think it is more a beneficial growth because virtual communication is an inevitable change in people's life. The main reason for interacting online is the fact what the virtual space makes the everyday life of people and the businessmen easier and comfortable, thereby quickly gain popularity. In fact, business with online shops expands the borders for sales that have a positive impact on their income, and makes life customers easier. For example, famous everywhere the site eBay has manufacturers from different countries with different types of deliveries, and for the taste of every user has comfortable filters that allow searching stuff easier. Firstly, the advantage of development space is providing wider opportunities for communication. For example, people via Skype, Viber or other software can always stay in touch with friends, relatives, or collaborators from different countries. Moreover, social sites allow finding like-minded people and help people with agoraphobia or other problems speak with people around the world. Likewise, many books, today, is digitised, therefore the online area help for studying and work; even more people around the world can find a teacher online. However, people cannot decline what the growth of the online space has drawbacks; and most important is dangerous because having many new type frauds that labelled now the cyber crime. For example, the World Wide Web has many viruses that can control personal computers, or stealing your private information or, even, money from a credit card. Likewise, the internet much time is used for bullying and in other dirty goals. For instance, youth tend to post offensive posts about people who less popular or weaker in their opinion. Besides, a society notices what people who use online area frequently catch in some type addicts afterwards have less interest in study and work. To conclude, presently people live in the era of technical progress; therefore, they cannot ignore advantages that provide new technology. Moreover, a society can evade all drawbacks if use the internet carefully and enhance security for users. Therefore, I believe what a virtual area is a beneficial evolution with many opportunities for everybody.
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overall
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change
in
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online
is the fact what the virtual space
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makes
the everyday life of
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people
and the businessmen easier and comfortable, thereby
quickly
gain popularity. In fact, business with
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online
shops expands the borders for sales that have a
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positive
impact on their income, and
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makes
life customers easier.
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,
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famous
everywhere the site eBay has manufacturers from
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different
countries with
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different
types of deliveries, and for the taste of every user has comfortable filters that
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allow
searching stuff easier.

Firstly
, the advantage of development space is providing wider opportunities for communication.
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,
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people
via Skype,
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Viber
or
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other
software can always stay in touch with friends, relatives, or collaborators from
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different
countries.
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, social sites
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allow
finding like-minded
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people
and
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help
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people
with agoraphobia or
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problems speak with
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people
around the
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world
.
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books,
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for studying and work; even more
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around the
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can find a teacher online.

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cannot decline what the growth of the
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space has drawbacks; and most
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new type frauds that labelled
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now
the cyber crime.
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, the
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World
Wide Web has
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many
viruses that can control personal computers, or stealing your private information or, even, money from a credit card.
Likewise
, the internet much time is
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used
for bullying and in
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other
dirty goals.
For instance
, youth tend to post offensive posts about
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people
who less popular or weaker in their opinion.
Besides
, a society notices what
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people
who
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use
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online
area
frequently
catch in
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some
type addicts afterwards have less interest in study and work.

To conclude
,
presently
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people
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live
in the era of technical progress;
therefore
, they cannot
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ignore
advantages that provide new technology.
Moreover
, a society can evade all drawbacks if
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use
the internet
carefully
and enhance security for users.
Therefore
, I believe what a virtual area is a beneficial evolution with
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many
opportunities for everybody.
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IELTS essay You are going away to travel for the summer. A friend will be looking after your house while you are away. Write a letter to your friend. Say where you are goingDescribe your houseExplain some of the things your friend must do to look after your house v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
368 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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