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Many people argue that smoking should be banned due to its harmful effects on human health. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.1

Many people argue that smoking should be banned due to its harmful effects on human health. with this statement? v. 1
It is often argued that smoking should be prohibited because of the adverse effect on people's health. This essay agrees with the idea that cigarette should be forbidden. The essay will first show that people can be negatively affected by cigarettes, and then it will demonstrate why it is necessary to impose a ban on smoking. Firstly, it is true that using cigarettes must not be allowed due to their adverse effect for people's health. This is because cigarettes contain a variety of toxic chemicals, including nicotine, which is able to damage people’s lung. As a result, people may suffer from various types of respiratory diseases, even fatal diseases like lung cancer, if they smoke as their daily routine. For example, in Vietnam, smoking is the reason for more than 40000 deaths every year, and most of these cases are lung cancer. Secondly, that is necessary for people to place a forbiddance on smoking in order to alleviate the problems in terms of human health. The reason is that if cigarette users stop smoking, their risk of suffering from hazardous ailments relating to their respiratory system can be reduced significantly. Moreover, people who do not smoke actively are also less likely to sniff harmful gases from cigarettes, because passive smokers can face with greater risks than active smokers, especially pregnant women, children and old people. Consequently, there are the reasons why many countries have put a ban on smoking, particularly in public places like schools and hospitals, and anyone who violates can be heavily fined. In conclusion, smoking is able to cause negative impacts for human health, so forbidding smoking is the action that should be implemented as soon as possible.
It is
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often
argued that
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smoking
should
be prohibited
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because
of the adverse effect on
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people
's
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health
. This essay
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agrees
with the
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idea
that
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cigarette
should
be forbidden
. The essay will
first
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show
that
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people
can be
negatively
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affected
by
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cigarettes
, and then it will demonstrate why it is necessary to impose a ban on smoking.

Firstly
, it is true that using
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cigarettes
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must
not be
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allowed
due to their adverse effect for
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people
's
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health
. This is
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because
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cigarettes
contain a variety of toxic chemicals, including nicotine, which is able to damage
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people’s
lung.
As a result
,
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people
may suffer from various types of respiratory diseases, even fatal diseases like lung cancer, if they smoke as their daily routine.
For example
, in Vietnam,
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smoking
is the reason for more than 40000 deaths every year, and most of these cases are lung cancer.

Secondly
,
that is
necessary for
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people
to place a
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forbiddance
on
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smoking
in order to alleviate the problems in terms of human
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health
. The reason is that if
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cigarette
users
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stop
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smoking
, their
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risk
of suffering from hazardous ailments relating to their respiratory system can be
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reduced
significantly
.
Moreover
,
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people
who do not smoke
actively
are
also
less likely to sniff harmful gases from
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cigarettes
,
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because
passive smokers can face with greater
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risks
than active smokers,
especially
pregnant women, children and
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old
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people
.
Consequently
, there are the reasons why
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many
countries have put a ban on
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smoking
,
particularly
in public places like schools and hospitals, and anyone who violates can be
heavily
fined.

In conclusion
,
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smoking
is able to cause
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negative
impacts for human
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health
,
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so
forbidding
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smoking
is the action that should
be implemented
as
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soon
as possible.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many people argue that smoking should be banned due to its harmful effects on human health. with this statement? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
281 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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