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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions. v.2

Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions. v. 2
In the contemporary era, green house gases are released by many industries to survive in the competitive market. These increase in pollution is effecting human health. Owing to this emissions, water levels in seas have been increasing to a greater extent. These are causing problems like frequent floods, inadequate drinking water and depletion of aquatic resources although, this can be addressed by building floods barriers, increasing fresh water storage facilities and preserving marine species. The problems related to rising sea levels are many. Firstly, floods have become a common phenomenon, consequently resulting in loss of life and business. Secondly, quantity of fresh water has reduced, owing to rise in salt water supply from oceans. For Instance, In india many rivers have saline water, which cannot be used for drinking. Finally, it has effected the marine life making it extremely difficult for them to survive. Every problem comes with a solution. To begin with, flood barriers should be constructed so that minimal people are effected in the events of floods. Furthermore, reservoirs should be built for keeping drinking water that can be used at the time of scarcity in water supply. For example, in the countries that are majorly dependent on rainfall, provisions are made for storage of rain water which is then used for irrigation. Lastly, aquatic life that dwell in sweet water can also survive by the help of such water reservoirs. To conclude, increase in pollution has resulted in many challenges for human life and has lead to higher sea levels. Because of this. problems persists like floods, inadequate drinking water and danger to aquatic life. The solutions to these problems are creating flood barriers, storing rain water and helping water life to survive.
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house
gases
are released
by
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many
industries to survive in the competitive market. These increase in pollution is effecting human health. Owing to
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this
emissions,
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water
levels in seas have been increasing to a greater extent. These are causing
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problems
like frequent
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floods
, inadequate
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drinking
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water
and depletion of aquatic resources although, this can
be addressed
by building
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floods
barriers, increasing fresh
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water
storage facilities and preserving marine species.

The
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problems
related to rising sea levels are
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many
.
Firstly
,
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floods
have become a common phenomenon,
consequently
resulting in loss of
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life
and business.
Secondly
, quantity of fresh
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water
has
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reduced
, owing to rise in salt
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water
supply from oceans.
For Instance
, In
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india
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many
rivers have saline
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water
, which cannot be
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used
for
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drinking
.
Finally
, it has effected the marine
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life
making it
extremely
difficult for them to survive.

Every
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problem
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comes
with a solution. To
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begin
with,
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barriers should
be constructed
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that minimal
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people
are effected
in the
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events
of
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floods
.
Furthermore
, reservoirs should
be built
for keeping
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drinking
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water
that can be
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used
at the time of scarcity in
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water
supply.
For example
, in the countries that are
majorly
dependent on rainfall, provisions
are made
for storage of rain
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water
which is then
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used
for irrigation.
Lastly
, aquatic
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life
that dwell in sweet
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water
can
also
survive by the
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help
of such
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water
reservoirs.

To conclude
, increase in pollution has resulted in
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many
challenges for human
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life
and has lead to higher sea levels.
Because of this
.
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problems
persists like
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floods
, inadequate
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drinking
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water
and
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danger
to aquatic
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life
. The solutions to these
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problems
are creating
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flood
barriers, storing rain
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water
and helping
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water
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life
to survive.
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36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
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