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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer v.2

The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. 2
The technological improvement gives many sources to live in this world with safety. Unfortunately, facing natural environment issues, While developing new devices. Utilisation is improved that cannot provide from nature. In this essay, discuss about safe alternatives, why need for that. To begin with, The main reason for choosing alternatives of fossil fuel that is the Global warmest. Nowadays, creators established automated cars without using fossil fuel that will be given the best results to avoid natural incomes. Fossil fuels are different types we have such as oil, natural incomes and coal. If we utilise those are in our product automatically that will be effected on the earthquake due to coal came from the earth. In addition, more effected on air and other environments. For that we should encourage technology development for reduce that uses. Secondly, safe alternatives receives energy from natural incomes such as solar power, hydropower and power forms. These are working on environment like air, water and sunrise, then definitely that will be effected on that. On the other hand, gas plants are costly to growing up, but that provides little fuel form more plants. The government must give opportunities to fuel forms and encourage the people who are invested safe alternatives to fossil electricity. I have to go with the conclusion, safe alternatives are giving the best results, but we need to take care that won't be effected on nature. We should take responsibility while using an automated device at the same time manufacturing time.
The technological improvement gives
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many
sources to
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live
in this world with safety. Unfortunately, facing
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natural
environment issues, While developing new devices.
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Utilisation
is
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improved
that cannot provide from nature. In this essay, discuss about
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safe
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alternatives
, why need for that.

To
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begin
with, The main reason for choosing
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alternatives
of
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fossil
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fuel
that is
the Global warmest. Nowadays, creators established automated cars without using
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fossil
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fuel
that will be
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given
the best results to avoid
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natural
incomes.
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Fossil
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fuels
are
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different
types we have such as oil,
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natural
incomes and coal.
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If
we
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utilise
those are in our product
automatically
that will be
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effected
on the earthquake due to coal came from the earth.
In addition
, more
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effected
on air and other environments. For that we should encourage technology development for
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reduce
that
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uses
.

Secondly
,
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safe
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alternatives
receives energy from
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natural
incomes such as solar power, hydropower and power forms. These are working on environment like air, water and sunrise, then definitely that will be
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effected
on that.

On the other hand
, gas plants are costly to growing up,
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but
that provides
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little
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fuel
form more plants. The
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government
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must
give opportunities to
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fuel
forms and encourage the
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people
who
are invested
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safe
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alternatives
to
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fossil
electricity.

I
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have to
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go with
the conclusion,
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safe
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alternatives
are giving the best results,
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but
we need to take care that won't be
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effected
on nature. We should take responsibility while using an automated device at the same time manufacturing time.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
26Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
249 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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