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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality continuously, students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on teachers. Others think the respect and discipline in the classroom will disappear. Which opinion do you prefer? v.2

Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality continuously, students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on teachers. Others think the respect and discipline in the classroom will disappear. Which opinion do you prefer? v. 2
Some people opine that students should be supported to evaluate or criticize teachers, while others are worried that these acts would lead to a chaotic classroom. I personally side with the former view because this two-way communication helps instructors refine their teaching methods and enables students to become more involved in the lessons. To begin with, educational standards can be raised because instructors can modify their ways of delivering lessons based on the students’ feedbacks. If, for example, the class is slow, it will be ineffective for instructors teach too fast so that most students would fail to retain the information. Therefore, based on the comments of students, lecturers would find it easier to know the appropriate speed of the lesson is appropriate for the class, and adjust themselves to their students. This would result in enhanced pedagogical methods of teachers. Furthermore, I believe giving students the freedom in expressing their thoughts and feelings would enable them to become more proactive. For instance, many countries are promoting students-centred teaching with two-way communication, where open discussions between teachers and students are encouraged. This approach has a clear advantage of making students become more involved in studying. Increased participation in classroom activities helps pupils understand and memorize lessons faster, which eventually improves the educational outcomes. In conclusion, I believe allowing students to make judgement on teachers would result in better pedagogical methods of the instructors and increased engagement of pupils in lessons. Consequently, I prefer the opinion that this measure should be encouraged to enhance educational quality, despite the risks of disrespect and indiscipline.
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personally
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refine their teaching methods and enables
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students
to become more involved in the lessons.

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begin
with, educational standards can
be raised
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because
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instructors
can modify their ways of delivering
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lessons
based on the
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students’
feedbacks. If,
for example
, the
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class
is slow, it will be ineffective for
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instructors
teach too
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fast
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that most
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students
would fail to retain the information.
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students
, lecturers would find it easier to know the appropriate speed of the
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lesson
is appropriate for the
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class
, and adjust themselves to their
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students
. This would result in enhanced pedagogical methods of teachers.

Furthermore
, I believe giving
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students
the freedom in expressing their thoughts and feelings would enable them to become more proactive.
For instance
,
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many
countries are promoting
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students-centred
teaching with two-way communication, where open discussions between teachers and
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students
are encouraged
. This approach has a
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clear
advantage of making
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students
become more involved in studying. Increased participation in classroom activities
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helps
pupils understand and memorize
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lessons
faster, which
eventually
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improves
the educational outcomes.

In conclusion
, I believe allowing
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students
to
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make
judgement on teachers would result in better pedagogical methods of the
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instructors
and increased engagement of pupils in
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lessons
.
Consequently
, I prefer the opinion that this measure should
be encouraged
to enhance educational quality, despite the
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risks
of disrespect and indiscipline.
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IELTS essay Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality continuously, students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on teachers. Others think the respect and discipline in the classroom will disappear. Which opinion do you prefer? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
262 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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