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Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.4

Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. v. 4
Some people believe that school children should study in a single sex institution, whereas others opine that integrated schools are more beneficial for overall growth of students. However, in my opinion, both have their pros and cons. In this essay, I will examine both opinion and will provide logical conclusion. On one hand, it is better for students in single sex college as they have less distractions and they can focus on their academic career more effectively. In other words, due to no interaction of the other gender, mind is stable and thus the energy can fully be utilized in studies. For instance, in India today, it was found that students score better in single sex colleges. Moreover, there are no relationship issues, no emotional imbalance and they come out to be more real as there is no show off fashion. On the other hand, co-aid schools provide a variety of personality traits in children which helps them in future. They know how to work with the other gender and it helps them to socialize with people quite easily, while students studied in all boys/girls college are more likely to have anxiety when they work with the other gender, especially for boys. For example, in a study, it was found that about 68% of boys who graduated from all boys college become anxious when they work with female colleagues. Further, it helps build communication skills and create a sense of togetherness with the other gender. In conclusion, integrating the genders can prevent social awkwardness later in life and make pupils more sociable in the company of other genders, but a school’s primary purpose is to educate and those with just one sex or the other outperform those that allow both.
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believe that
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children should study in a single
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institution, whereas others opine that integrated
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schools
are more beneficial for
overall
growth of
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.
However
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On one hand, it is better for
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students
in single
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college as they have
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less
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distractions and
they can focus on their academic career more
effectively
. In
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words, due to no interaction of the
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gender, mind is stable and
thus
the energy can
fully
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in studies.
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, in India
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was found
that
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score better in single
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colleges.
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imbalance and
they
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out to be more real as there is no
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show
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On the
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provide a variety of personality traits in children which
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. They know how to work with the
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them to socialize with
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quite
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studied in all boys/girls college are more likely to have anxiety when they work with the
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gender,
especially
for boys.
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was found
that about 68% of boys who graduated from all
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boys
college become anxious when they work with female colleagues.
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helps
build communication
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skills
and create a sense of togetherness with the
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gender.

In conclusion
, integrating the genders can
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prevent
social awkwardness later in life and
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pupils more sociable in the
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genders,
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one
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or the
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outperform those that
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both.
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IELTS essay Some people think that students in single-sex schools perform better academically. Others, however, believe that mixed schools provide children with better social skills for adult life. v. 4

Essay
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