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Many people are working at home rather than in the workplace Some people believe this will bring benefits to the workers and their families but others suggest it will cause stress in the home Discuss both sides and give your opinion v.1

Many people are working at home rather than in the workplace Some people believe this will bring benefits to the workers and their families but others suggest it will cause stress in the home 1
With technology increasingly being able to support a suitable home office environment, working from home is becoming an attractive option for many employees. Employees gain the advantages of being able to make better use of time and avoid costs associated with working, but at the same time this arrangement may interfere with their home environment. In this essay the merits of working from home compared to working in the office will be discussed. Working from home allows people to avoid the need to travel to and from work giving employees additional hours in the working week that can be used for either work related activities or provide a more balanced lifestyle. For example, the additional time could be used to take children to and from school. Employees will also have lower costs, particularly in relation to transportation. For example, if one partner works from home a family may be able to avoid buying a second car providing them with significant savings. Savings may also be made in other areas such as food and entertainment costs. In addition, the breaks from work that most people take during the day can be used to perform household chores. The lack of other employees also means that there are no social norms and in quiet periods an employee can read the paper or a book or even watch television, activities that would be socially unacceptable in an office environment but do not impact on performance and may lower stress and have a positive influence on well-being. However, employees may experience significant difficulties in working from home. They have no physical barrier between their work and home life as their office is ever-present and could interfere with having a normal family life unless carefully managed. Employees may also feel isolated as they do not have co workers with them and may lose valuable information that is sometimes passed by casual interactions in the office and fail to have the opportunities to build the relationships that are essential for career development and promotion. In summary, working from home provides many advantages including lower costs, having more available time and being better for the environment. However, the time spent working from home must be managed carefully as there are risks of isolation, negatively impacting family life and loss of productivity.
With technology
increasingly
being able to support a suitable home
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office
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environment
,
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working
from home is becoming an attractive option for
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many
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employees
.
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Employees
gain the advantages of being able to
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make
better
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use
of
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time
and avoid costs associated with
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working
,
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but
at the same
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time
this arrangement may interfere with their home
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environment
. In this essay the merits of
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working
from home compared to
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working
in the
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office
will
be discussed
.

Working from home
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allows
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people
to avoid the need to travel to and from
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work
giving
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employees
additional hours in the
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working
week that can be
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used
for either
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work
related activities or provide a more balanced lifestyle.
For example
, the additional
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time
could be
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used
to take children to and from school.

Employees will
also
have lower costs,
particularly
in relation to transportation.
For example
, if one partner works from home a family may be able to avoid buying a second car providing them with significant savings. Savings may
also
be made
in other areas such as food and entertainment costs.

In addition
, the breaks from
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work
that most
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people
take during the day can be
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used
to perform household chores. The lack of other
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employees
also
means that there are no social norms and in quiet periods an
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employee
can read the paper or a book or even
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watch
television, activities that would be
socially
unacceptable in an
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office
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environment
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but
do not impact on performance and may lower
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stress
and have a
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positive
influence on well-being.

However
,
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employees
may experience significant difficulties in
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working
from home. They have no physical barrier between their
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work
and home life as their
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office
is ever-present and could interfere with having a normal family life unless
carefully
managed.
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Employees
may
also
feel isolated as they do not have
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co workers
with them and may lose valuable information
that is
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sometimes
passed by casual interactions in the
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office
and fail to have the opportunities to build the relationships that are essential for career development and promotion.

In summary,
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working
from home provides
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many
advantages including lower costs, having more available
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time
and being better for the
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environment
.
However
, the
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time
spent
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working
from home
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must
be managed
carefully
as there are
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risks
of isolation,
negatively
impacting family life and loss of productivity.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people are working at home rather than in the workplace Some people believe this will bring benefits to the workers and their families but others suggest it will cause stress in the home 1

Essay
  American English
6 paragraphs
383 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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