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Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v.2

Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v. 2
Nowadays, the internet has gained a lot of attention in terms of searching for information by most of them Instead of books. As there are plenty of resources to gain information through a browser. However, online information sometime is not that legitimate. But, books are genuine. One must respect books, as the author puts his whole life experience. I think it is a positive move, but at the same time, it completely depends upon the kind of information looking. It is very comfortable to look for something to gain knowledge and also from various sources. Online information gets updated at regular interval, it does not take much time to look for the information which we are looking for and it is fascinating to know the reaction of a other members, as it is a global platform. Such as we you are reading a blog which it get updated on a regular basis, at the same time we also get to know the feedback of other reader around the world. However, there is no guarantee that all information on the internet is true, you can get into trouble by reading wrong. But, Books are a complete life experience of an author. Such as, if you are following a technical blog, which consist of latest gadget information, but there are hidden truth which blogger doesn’t know as blogger didn’t used that gadget completely. So there is a small fear of gain false information. To conclude, though it is a positive move to get information from various sources on the internet but at the same time we cannot completely trust such information, I believe.
Nowadays, the internet has gained
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a lot of
attention in terms of searching for
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information
by most of them
Instead
of
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books
.
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As
there are
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plenty
of resources to gain
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information
through a browser.
However
, online
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information
sometime is not that legitimate.
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But
,
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books
are genuine. One
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must
respect
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books
, as the author puts his whole life experience. I
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think
it is a
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positive
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move
,
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but
at the same
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time
, it completely depends upon the kind of
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information
looking.

It is
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very
comfortable to look for something to gain knowledge and
also
from various sources. Online
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information
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gets
updated at regular interval, it does not take much
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time
to look for the
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information
which we are looking for and it is fascinating to know the reaction of
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a
other
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members
, as it is a global platform. Such as we you are reading a blog which it
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get
updated on a regular basis, at the same
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time
we
also
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get
to know the feedback of other reader around the world.

However
, there is no guarantee that all
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information
on the internet is true, you can
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get
into trouble by reading
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wrong
.
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But
,
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Books
are a complete life experience of an author. Such as, if you are following a technical blog, which consist of
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latest
gadget
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information
,
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but
there
are hidden
truth which blogger doesn’t know as blogger didn’t
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used
that gadget completely.
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So
there is a
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small
fear of gain false information.

To conclude
, though it is a
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positive
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move
to
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get
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information
from various sources on the internet
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but
at the same
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time
we cannot completely trust such
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information
, I believe.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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