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Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v.1

Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v. 1
An increasing number of people nowadays choose to seek information and answers to their queries online, rather than to seek the same using books. I view this change as a positive development as far as ease of accessibility is concerned. However, this change has had a detrimental effect on the trustworthiness of information available. First and foremost, with a constant and rapid increase in the number of people with access to the internet, the entirety of the vast collection of human knowledge is now available at people’s fingertips. In contrast to books, which may be limited in their range and scope, the internet has enabled people to obtain knowledge, to the extent and detail that they may desire, whenever they may choose to do so. This choice is not constrained by geographical location or by time, only by their connectivity and desire. For example, there has been a rise in the number of people enrolling in online courses to enhance their skills and knowledge throughout the world. A large majority of these students are located in developing countries, many of whom seek to gain instruction of the highest standard, and unlike the age of books, are not restricted to the options locally available to them. However, along with the stated benefit, the drawback of people turning to the internet for answers is a rise in the prevalence of inaccurate, misleading and factually incorrect information. Unlike books, and the content contained therein, which goes through several stages of scrutiny before being published, information available online is not scrutinised in a similar manner. This has led to the rise of incorrect information being disseminated, either erroneously or purposefully with a mala-fide intent to spread misinformation. As an example, with the general elections for the Indian republic fast approaching, there has been a marked rise in the number of articles and posts on various online platforms, with factually incorrect and often polarising information. The intent behind such publications, appears to be, to sway the electorate using misinformation campaigns. To conclude, I would like to state that the increasing preference of people to seek knowledge online is a positive development, as it reduces the barriers to gain learning and improves access to information. However, the same comes with the drawback of leading to a rise in factual errors and spread of misinformation due to a lack of scrutiny.
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nowadays choose to
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seek
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information
and answers to their queries
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online
,
rather
than to
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seek
the same using
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books
. I view this
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as a
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positive
development as far as
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ease
of accessibility
is concerned
.
However
, this
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change
has had a detrimental effect on the trustworthiness of
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information
available.

First
and foremost, with a constant and rapid increase in the
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number
of
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people
with access to the internet, the entirety of the vast collection of human
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knowledge
is
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now
available at
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people’s
fingertips.
In contrast
to
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books
, which may
be limited
in their range and scope, the internet has enabled
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people
to obtain
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knowledge
, to the extent and detail that they may desire, whenever they may choose to do
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so
. This choice is not constrained by geographical location or by time,
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only
by their connectivity and desire.
For example
, there has been a
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rise
in the
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number
of
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people
enrolling in
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online
courses to enhance their
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skills
and
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knowledge
throughout the world. A large majority of these students
are located
in
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developing countries
,
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many
of whom
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seek
to gain instruction of the highest standard, and unlike the age of
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books
, are not restricted to the options
locally
available to them.

However
, along with the stated benefit, the drawback of
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people
turning to the internet for answers is a
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rise
in the prevalence of inaccurate, misleading and
factually
incorrect
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information
. Unlike
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books
, and the content contained therein, which goes through several stages of scrutiny
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before
being published
,
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information
available
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online
is not
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in a similar manner
. This has led to the
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rise
of incorrect
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information
being disseminated
, either
erroneously
or
purposefully
with a
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mala-fide
intent to spread misinformation. As an example, with the general elections for the Indian republic
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fast
approaching, there has been a marked
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rise
in the
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number
of articles and posts on various
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online
platforms, with
factually
incorrect and
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often
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polarising
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information
. The intent behind such publications, appears to be, to sway the electorate using misinformation campaigns.

To conclude
, I would like to state that the increasing preference of
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people
to
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seek
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knowledge
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online
is a
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positive
development, as it
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reduces
the barriers to gain learning and
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improves
access to
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information
.
However
, the same
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comes
with the drawback of leading to a
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rise
in factual errors and spread of misinformation due to a lack of scrutiny.
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IELTS essay Many people are choosing to find information online rather than in books. Is this development positive or negative? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
394 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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