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Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the leader say something incorrect, In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? 1. Interrupt and correct the mistake right away; 2. Wait until the class or meeting is ov v.2

Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the leader say something incorrect, In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? 1. Interrupt and correct the mistake right away; 2. Wait until the class or meeting is ov v. 2
Lots of health issues are being caused due to the increasing number of overweight people, which are affecting the health care system putting pressure on it. There are some people who think that upgrading the school education system with more physical education credits is the best solution, In my opinion, although Physical activity and exercising are necessary to maintain a healthier physical condition, good eating habits are also required. Firstly, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and weight problems is best solved by taking a long-term approach and introducing the more sport in schools. Particularly, this method will ensure that the next generation will be healthier and will not have such health problems. For instance, the average child in the West does sport possibly twice a week, which is not enough to into the curriculum as well as encouraging extracurricular sports activities, they will undoubtedly become fitter and more active. Furthermore, is that having more sports lessons for children in schools will probably result in children developing an interest in exercise which might filter through to other members of their family and have a longer-lasting effect. In other words, parents with sporty children are more likely to get involved in the sport as a way of encouraging their children. By both parents and children being involved, it will ensure that children grow up to incorporate sport into their daily lives. This is certainly a natural and lasting way to improve public health. In conclusion, to deal with an increasing population of unfit, overweight people, changing the lifestyle of the coming generation by introducing the sport in schools is the easiest and most effective method to use.
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being caused
due to the increasing number of overweight
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people
, which are affecting the health care system putting pressure on it. There are
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some
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people
who
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think
that upgrading the
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school
education system with more physical education credits is the best solution, In my opinion, although Physical activity and exercising are necessary to maintain a healthier physical condition,
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good
eating habits are
also
required.

Firstly
, dealing with the issues surrounding obesity and weight problems is best solved by taking a long-term approach and introducing the more
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sport
in
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schools
.
Particularly
, this method will ensure that the
next
generation will be healthier and will not have such health problems.
For instance
, the average child in the West does
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sport
possibly
twice a week, which is not
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enough
to into the curriculum
as well
as encouraging extracurricular
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sports
activities, they will
undoubtedly
become fitter and more active.

Furthermore
, is that having more
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sports
lessons for
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children
in
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schools
will
probably
result in
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children
developing an interest in exercise which might filter through to other members of their family and have a longer-lasting effect.
In other words
, parents with sporty
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children
are more likely to
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get
involved in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sport
as a way of encouraging their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
. By both parents and
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children
being involved
, it will ensure that
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children
grow up to incorporate
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sport
into their daily
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lives
. This is
certainly
a natural and lasting way to
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improve
public health.

In conclusion
, to deal with an increasing population of unfit, overweight
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people
, changing the lifestyle of the coming generation by introducing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sport
in
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schools
is the easiest and most effective method to
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use
.
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IELTS essay Imagine that you are in a classroom or a meeting. The teacher or the leader say something incorrect, In your opinion, which of the following is the best thing to do? 1. Interrupt and correct the mistake right away; 2. Wait until the class or meeting is ov v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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