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The tendency of human beings to copy one other is shown in the popularity of some fashion clothes and consumer goods. To what extent do you agree? v.1

The tendency of human beings to copy one other is shown in the popularity of some fashion clothes and consumer goods. v. 1
Since the dawn of time people have been inclined towards replicating eachother in their habits and preferences. This can be seen by how the masses opt to wear similar types of clothing and purchase the same kinds of goods. I agree that this is true to some extent. Mankind is a race of unity. For this reason people feel the need to be in sync with each other in order to fit in. This is because they want to belong to something and have a greater sense of identity. Therefore, mirroring the style of others is a common way of how individuals feel united, especially if it is for a certain cause. For example, in the late 1980's when the freedom movement began in NYC, everyone was wearing jeans. This trend became famous, and these denim trousers were seen as a symbol of participating in the common cause of; freedom. Ever since, men and women worldwide style these pants regardless of how they clash with their cultures simply because they are desired. However, homosapiens do not simply mimic each other for the sake of imitation. This is examplified by consumer goods. Some buyable objects are absolute necessities, such as, food and phones. Consequently, men and women will make purchase them, regardless of how desired they are. Even though certain brands are more sought after than others, they will still be consumed. In addition to this, this can be applied to fashionable clothing items as well. Although brands have a much higher demand, there are some staple clothes that are the basis of clothing that will never stop being bought. Undeniably, not all purchases are made on the basis of mimicry. In conclusion, while humans become one when they are similar in their habits and life choices, their unifcation can be seen in other ways, like the way they think or their lifestyle choices. Consumerable goods and attire may sometimes prove this to be true, but it is not always the case.
Since the dawn of time
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people
have
been inclined
towards replicating
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eachother
in their habits and preferences. This can be
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seen
by how the masses opt to wear similar types of clothing and
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purchase
the same kinds of
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goods
. I
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agree
that this is true to
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some
extent.

Mankind is a race of unity.
For this reason
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people
feel the need to be in sync with each
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other
in order to fit in. This is
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because
they want to belong to something and have a greater sense of identity.
Therefore
, mirroring the style of others is a common way of how individuals feel united,
especially
if it is for a certain cause.
For example
, in the late
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1980's
when the freedom movement began in NYC, everyone was wearing jeans. This trend became
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famous
, and these denim trousers were
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seen
as a symbol of participating in the common cause of; freedom. Ever since,
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men
and women worldwide style these pants regardless of how they clash with their cultures
simply
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because
they
are desired
.

However
,
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homosapiens
do not
simply
mimic each
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other
for the sake of imitation. This is
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examplified
by consumer
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goods
.
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Some
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buyable
objects are absolute necessities, such as, food and phones.
Consequently
,
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men
and women will
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make
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purchase
them, regardless of how desired they are.
Even though
certain brands are more sought after than others, they will
still
be consumed
.
In addition
to this, this can
be applied
to fashionable clothing items
as well
. Although brands have a much higher demand, there are
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some
staple clothes that are the basis of clothing that will never
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stop
being
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bought
.
Undeniably
, not all
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purchases
are made
on the basis of mimicry.

In conclusion
, while humans become one when they are similar in their habits and life choices, their
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unifcation
can be
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seen
in
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other
ways, like the way they
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think
or their lifestyle choices.
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Consumerable
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goods
and attire may
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sometimes
prove this to be true,
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but
it is not always the case.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay The tendency of human beings to copy one other is shown in the popularity of some fashion clothes and consumer goods. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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