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Many old buildings are protected by law because they are part of a nation’s history. However, some people think old buildings should be knocked down to make way for new ones because people need houses and offices. v.4

Many old buildings are protected by law because they are part of a nation’s history. However, some people think old buildings should be knocked down to make way for new ones because people need houses and offices. v. 4
It is a common thing that governments will protect some of the historical buildings in their country, but some people disagree with it. They believe that these old buildings should be demolished and replaced with new ones, as the demand for properties is increasing rapidly these days. I believe that maintaining some of the historical buildings is an important thing and a combination between classic and modern buildings in the city would be an advantage for the city itself. For a number of reasons, maintaining historical building is an important thing. Firstly, these historical buildings have become the witness of some of the country's significant and monumental events. For example, White House had been the witness of how the American had obtained its independence from the British, and how slavery had been ceased by Abraham Lincoln. Secondly, many old buildings contain a priceless value of art, as some buildings were designed by famous architects or painted by some legendary painters such as the church in Rome which was painted by Michelangelo. Therefore it is important for the government to preserve old buildings. Many cities have successfully combined classic and modern buildings in their master plan. As they have realised that this combination would make the city become more attractive. In cities such as in London, Brussels and Paris, people would commonly see that many historical buildings are preserved as museums or become government offices. Standing to these historical buildings are new and modern buildings which have a futuristic design. Many people believe that the combination has made these cities become unique and attractive for tourists. As a result, it has boosted the city tourism industry and created a lot of job opportunities for the local people. In conclusion, many countries are protecting old buildings, as they believe that preserving and maintaining the buildings is an essential thing. Although some people think that old buildings should be replaced with new ones as the demand for properties has increased significantly, I personally believe that some of the old buildings should be preserved, as they have historical and artistic values. Besides that, the combination of old and modern buildings would make the city become more unique and it would attract many tourists.
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governments
will protect
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historical
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buildings
in their country,
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but
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some
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people
disagree with it. They
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believe
that these
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old
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buildings
should
be demolished
and replaced with new ones, as the demand for properties is increasing
rapidly
these days. I
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believe
that maintaining
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some of the
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historical
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buildings
is an
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important
thing and a
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combination
between classic and
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modern
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buildings
in the city would be an advantage for the city itself.

For a number of reasons, maintaining
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historical
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building
is an
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important
thing.
Firstly
, these
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historical
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buildings
have
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become
the witness of
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some
of the country's significant and monumental
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events
.
For example
, White
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House
had been the witness of how the American had obtained its independence from the British, and how slavery had
been ceased
by Abraham Lincoln.
Secondly
,
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many
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old
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buildings
contain a priceless value of art, as
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some
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buildings
were designed
by
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famous
architects or painted by
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some
legendary painters such as the church in Rome which
was painted
by Michelangelo.
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Therefore
it is
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important
for the
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government
to preserve
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old
buildings.

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cities
have
successfully
combined classic and
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modern
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buildings
in their master plan.
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As
they have
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realised
that this
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combination
would
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make
the city
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become
more attractive. In
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cities
such as in London, Brussels and Paris,
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people
would
commonly
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see
that
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many
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historical
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buildings
are preserved
as museums or
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become
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government
offices. Standing to these
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historical
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buildings
are new and
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modern
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buildings
which have a futuristic design.
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Many
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people
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believe
that the
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combination
has made these
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cities
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become
unique and attractive for tourists.
As a result
, it has boosted the city tourism industry and created
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a lot of
job opportunities for the local
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people
.

In conclusion
,
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many
countries are protecting
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old
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buildings
, as they
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believe
that preserving and maintaining the
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buildings
is an essential thing. Although
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some
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people
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think
that
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old
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buildings
should
be replaced
with new ones as the demand for properties has increased
significantly
, I
personally
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believe
that
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some of the
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old
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buildings
should
be preserved
, as they have
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historical
and artistic values.
Besides
that, the
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combination
of
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old
and
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modern
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buildings
would
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make
the city
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become
more unique and it would attract
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many
tourists.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
56Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Many old buildings are protected by law because they are part of a nation’s history. However, some people think old buildings should be knocked down to make way for new ones because people need houses and offices. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
369 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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