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Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation's history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v.4

Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation's history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v. 4
In the contemporary age, the contradiction of old buildings being demolished for the expansion of new houses and office purposes as tantamount as the supporters of those who want to preserve the old buildings. Some essential factors should be scrutinized such as a huge gap in prices in the previous era to now. More importantly, the sentimental meaning behind these architectures and those who constructed can not just be neglected. However, from the long term of view, these buildings can amazingly cooperate in equipping edification for current progress. One common motivation for perpetuating these ancient architectures such as many medieval buildings is the startling prize of elements. The crafted-wood, high ceiling, thicker wall are customarily taking millions of dollars, and arduous to accomplish as how much time it can be consumed as well as finding a crafting connoisseur. One common concern is whether this old antique building that has been the icon and landmark for ages of the nation be just replaced by any other modern constructions. These intricate buildings that were designed and built many years ago can be seen as the fossils and artefacts of architectures, for example, "Taj Mahal" in India, "Great Wall" in China have a very pivotal figure for the citizen as reminding them for their great ancestors. It is advocated that these great historical buildings are not being shattered, but being modified, for the reason for the safety of visitors. However, preserving the aged buildings is linked to the ongoing advancement of buildings. Making no transitions in antique architecture is utterly cooperative in averting mistakes for the current progress, and giving those who are in architecture speciality can use their time wisely in reforming multitude modern buildings such as skyscrapers. Based on the exploration and discussion above, we conclude that the demolishing of old buildings intention does not bolster the architects or the larger community. In the meantime, a minor adjustment is highly required, for the betterment of the building itself and concerning peoples safety.
In the contemporary age, the contradiction of
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old
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buildings
being demolished
for the expansion of new
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houses
and office purposes as tantamount as the supporters of those who want to preserve the
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old
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buildings
.
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Some
essential factors should
be scrutinized
such as a huge gap in prices in the previous era to
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now
. More
importantly
, the sentimental meaning behind these
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architectures
and those who constructed can not
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just
be neglected
.
However
, from the long term of view, these
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buildings
can
amazingly
cooperate in equipping edification for
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current
progress.

One common motivation for perpetuating these ancient
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architectures
such as
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many
medieval
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buildings
is the startling prize of elements. The crafted-wood, high ceiling, thicker wall are
customarily
taking millions of dollars, and arduous to accomplish as how much time it can
be consumed
as well
as finding a crafting connoisseur.

One common concern is whether this
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old
antique
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building
that has been the icon and landmark for ages of the nation be
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just
replaced by any other modern constructions. These intricate
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buildings
that
were designed
and built
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many
years ago can be
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seen
as the fossils and
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artefacts
of
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architectures
,
for example
,
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"
Taj Mahal
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in India,
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Great Wall
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in China have a
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very
pivotal figure for the citizen as reminding them for their great ancestors. It
is advocated
that these great historical
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buildings
are not
being shattered
,
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but
being modified
, for the reason for the safety of visitors.

However
, preserving the aged
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buildings
is linked
to the ongoing advancement of
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buildings
. Making no transitions in antique
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architecture
is
utterly
cooperative in averting mistakes for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
progress, and giving those who are in
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architecture
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speciality
can
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use
their time
wisely
in reforming multitude modern
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buildings
such as skyscrapers.

Based on the exploration and discussion above, we conclude that the demolishing of
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old
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buildings
intention does not bolster the architects or the larger community. In the meantime, a minor adjustment is
highly
required, for the betterment of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
building
itself and concerning peoples safety.
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21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Many old buildings protected by law are part of a nation's history. Some people think they should be knocked down and replaced by new ones. How important is it to maintain old buildings? Should history stand in the way of progress? v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
331 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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