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Many of the world’s cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solutions can you suggest? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.2

Many of the world’s cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solutions can you suggest? v. 2
Currently, many cities around the world are facing a rapid increase in the number of shortages in accommodation. This essay will discuss the two main reasons for the scarcity of houses which includes, increased rural-urban migration and Increased population growth. This essay will also suggest solutions to counter these problems which includes, increasing job availabilities in rural areas and building adequate housing systems in towns surrounding the city. There are increasing number of population growth world-wide. In addition, many people are found moving from the villages into the cities. Cities exist under these unfavourable conditions because, most people migrate from rural areas into the urban zones for greener pastures, therefore, increasing the demand for shelter in the cities due to increase in urban population. For instance, people from villages relocates to municipalities with adequate infrastructure and to secure higher paying jobs, in order to be able to cater for their families and themselves. Moreover, the government focuses much on the country’s forest reserves rather than allocating portions for construction of houses. This usually leads to homelessness because the number of people in demand is higher than the number of apartments available. Conversely, the best answers to eliminate these problems are to provide sufficient job opportunities and to increase the number of buildings in towns closer to these cities. Therefore, reducing the issues of housing shortages. The government needs to know that developing rural sectors will deflate pressure on infrastructure and housing in the city. People may be able to live around the city rather than in the township when this is initiated. For example, in order to prevent immigrants from finding it difficult to get a place to live, especially towns not more than 30 mins drive to the city should equally have adequate shelter for citizens and aliens. Therefore, in order to prevent shortages, private and government sectors must shoot up the number of spaces for settlement all around the country. In conclusion, in today’s fast paced world, cities are facing serious housing shortages due to increase in the number of people. This essay discussed the reasons behind this occurrence which were, increases population growth and rise in rural-urban migration. This essay also mentioned some solutions including, creating workspaces in small towns and creating rooms for people away from the cities.
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will discuss the two main reasons for the scarcity of
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which includes, increased rural-urban migration and Increased
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population
growth. This
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will
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suggest solutions to counter these problems which includes, increasing job availabilities in rural areas and building adequate housing systems in
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towns
surrounding the city.

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growth world-wide.
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are found
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Cities
exist under these
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unfavourable
conditions
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people
migrate from rural areas into the urban zones for greener pastures,
therefore
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cities
due to
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increase
in urban
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population
.
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,
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people
from villages relocates to municipalities with adequate infrastructure and to secure higher paying jobs, in order to be able to cater for their families and themselves.
Moreover
, the
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government
focuses much on the country’s forest reserves
rather
than allocating portions for construction of
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houses
. This
usually
leads to homelessness
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number
of
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people
in demand is higher than the
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number
of apartments available.

Conversely
, the best answers to eliminate these problems are to provide sufficient job opportunities and to
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increase
the
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number
of buildings in
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towns
closer to these
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cities
.
Therefore
, reducing the issues of housing
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shortages
. The
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government
needs to know that developing rural sectors will deflate pressure on infrastructure and housing in the city.
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may be able to
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around the city
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than in the township when this
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,
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not more than 30
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mins
drive to the city should
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, private and
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sectors
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of spaces for settlement all around the country.

In conclusion
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are facing serious housing
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. This
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essay
discussed the reasons behind this occurrence which were,
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increases
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population
growth and rise in rural-urban migration. This
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also
mentioned
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some
solutions including, creating workspaces in
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small
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towns
and creating rooms for
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people
away from the
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cities
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IELTS essay Many of the world’s cities are currently facing a serious housing shortage. What are some of the reasons for this shortage and what solutions can you suggest? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
382 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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