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Longer life spans and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of sixty-five can continue to live full and active lives. In what ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make? v.6

The older people which shows improvements of health that over the age of sixty five can live actively and passionately. The older people can gives benefit from their contribution for the society. These benefits are twofold. First of all, it is a farming that can make the elderly becoming active and productive. Farming is a useful activities that often done by the older people, because, farming also can overcoming stress. For example, many older people in District Kuranji doing farming. Even though in District Kuranji there were older people made farmers groups and already have their own garden, they grown ornamental trees, flowers and fruits. If in their garden has plants which has fruits, they will shared together. Additionally, they even have a special schedule for farming. Secondly, processing of waste plastics into souvenirs. Many plastic waste produced by all people in the world every day. Because of that, the older people make their passionately to reduce the plastic waste. Besides, this activity is very useful to make the older people have active lives, the waste of plastic in the world produced into new stuff. For example, souvenirs, home decorations, and bags. Because this programs, the society to be interest with plastic waste which has become new stuff. By way the conclusion, in my view the older people can gives benefit from their contribution in some useful activity.
The
older
people
which
shows
improvements of health that over the age of
sixty five
can
live
actively
and
passionately
. The
older
people
can gives benefit from their contribution for the society. These benefits are twofold.

First of all
, it is a
farming
that can
make
the elderly becoming active and productive.
Farming
is
a useful activities
that
often
done by the
older
people
,
because
,
farming
also
can
overcoming
stress
.
For example
,
many
older
people
in District
Kuranji
doing
farming
.
Even though
in District
Kuranji
there were
older
people
made farmers groups and already have their
own
garden, they
grown


ornamental trees, flowers and fruits. If in their garden has plants which has fruits, they will
shared
together.
Additionally
, they even have a special schedule for farming.

Secondly
, processing of
waste
plastics
into souvenirs.
Many
plastic
waste
produced by all
people
in the world every day.
Because
of that, the
older
people
make
their
passionately
to
reduce
the
plastic
waste
.
Besides
, this activity is
very
useful to
make
the
older
people
have active
lives
, the
waste
of
plastic
in the world produced into new stuff.
For example
, souvenirs, home decorations, and bags.
Because
this programs, the society to be interest with
plastic
waste
which has become new stuff.

By way the conclusion, in my view the
older
people
can gives benefit from their contribution in
some


useful activity.
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IELTS essay Longer life spans and improvements in the health of older people suggest that people over the age of sixty-five can continue to live full and active lives. In the ways can society benefit from the contribution that older people can make?

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