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Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or new v.3

Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or new v. 3
It is argued by many that just a little percentage of the waste we produce is then recycled, and governments have the responsibility to make it a legal requirement. Personally, I agree with this and believe that stricter rules has to be made in order to improve separate collection. However, I think that they should make an enormous effort in raising awareness on how to do it correctly, as people are often confused about the different types of litter. A regulation of the law regarding recycling is needed to make people stick to the rules, as they would pay more attention and be fined in the case they don't. Nowadays, we are submerged by litter and only about 35% of what we produce is actually recycled. Here is mostly because people feel like they are too busy on doing their own things and they would rather not lose much time on differentiation. Moreover, there are still some deprived countries where differentiation is not even an option and not a main concern, and the population keeps producing tons of undifferentiated garbage. This is why legal requirement by the government would have a tremendous impact worldwide. Simultaneously, raising awareness among people would be highly beneficial for recycling purposes. In fact, there is still confusion about different types of waste and, for example, different kind of plastic. Over the years, several categories of packaging (sometimes even mixed), like plastics, paper, Styrofoam, metals, have been launched on the market, and it is still not clear if all of them can be recycled or not. It would be a wise and effective move from the government to promote awareness in every single citizen. To conclude, I agree with the need of improving the law in order to recycle the most as possible. Nonetheless, this is not the only solution, as people are sometimes not conscious of packaging materials and differentiation, so enhancing information would be extremely helpful.
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little
percentage of the waste we produce is then recycled, and
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governments
have the responsibility to
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make
it a legal requirement.
Personally
, I
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agree
with this and believe that stricter
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rules
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has to
be made
in order to
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improve
separate collection.
However
, I
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think
that they should
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make
an enormous effort in raising awareness on how to do it
correctly
, as
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people
are
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often
confused about the
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different
types of litter.

A regulation of the law regarding recycling
is needed
to
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make
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people
stick to the
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rules
, as they would pay more attention and
be fined
in the case they don't. Nowadays, we
are submerged
by litter and
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only
about 35% of what we produce is actually recycled. Here is
mostly
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because
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people
feel like they are too busy on doing their
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things and
they would
rather
not lose much time on differentiation.
Moreover
, there are
still
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some
deprived countries where differentiation is not even an option and not a main concern, and the population
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keeps
producing tons of undifferentiated garbage. This is why legal requirement by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
would have a tremendous impact worldwide.

Simultaneously
, raising awareness among
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
would be
highly
beneficial for recycling purposes. In fact, there is
still
confusion about
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different
types of waste and,
for example
,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
kind of plastic. Over the years, several categories of packaging (
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sometimes
even mixed), like plastics, paper, Styrofoam, metals, have
been launched
on the market, and it is
still
not
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clear
if all of them can
be recycled
or not. It would be a wise and effective
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
from the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to promote awareness in every single citizen.

To conclude
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with the need of improving the law in order to recycle the most as possible. Nonetheless, this is not the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
solution, as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sometimes
not conscious of packaging materials and differentiation,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
enhancing information would be
extremely
helpful.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
The limits of my language mean the limits of my world.
Ludwig Wittgenstein

IELTS essay Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or new v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
322 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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