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Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people? Give reasons for your answer. Write at least 250 words. v.2

Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people? v. 2
I agree with that, In trendy sector, All social networks are working for celebrities for every minute that agree with some, while others are not. I will discuss some reasons here such as to improve their rating and these networks provides best information about them. First, every day opens any magazines or Tv channels showing the front page about only of famous people that will be discussed with organiser, founder, philotrophist that gives knowledge to people how they struggle in their career. It should be given confidence to other people, while they face any problem in life. For example: Rathan Tata is a good business person as well as a best founder and helper to society. He established so many companies to provide employment for people. The country faces circumstances, he will be taking a first place in that country. These news will give awareness to about him diversely few things also learn children if we read that story. Secondly, Those news papers, Magazines are showing cinema celebrities on their front page only for improving their rating. No Matter there, but they publish silly things such as what they eat, where they go that not essential to them. I am not saying all cinema celebrates some are there, even Tv serials, small screen people also they show. Youth may divert to unnecessary things that was the best for our society. Often some pics also we cannot see if we sit with the children. I have to go the conclusion, Newpapers, Magazines are public servants that should give awareness to everyone about strong people who sacrifice their life. If you publish for famous people it will be useful to the academy.
I
agree
with that, In trendy sector, All social networks are working for celebrities for every minute that
agree
with
some
, while others are not. I will discuss
some
reasons here such as to
improve
their rating and these networks
provides best
information about them.

First
, every day opens any magazines or
Tv
channels showing the front page about
only
of
famous
people
that will
be discussed
with
organiser
, founder,
philotrophist
that gives knowledge to
people
how they struggle in their career. It should be
given
confidence to other
people
, while they face any problem in life.
For example
:
Rathan
Tata is a
good
business person
as well
as
a
best founder and helper to society. He established
so
many
companies
to provide employment for
people
. The country faces circumstances, he will be taking a
first
place in that country.
These news
will give awareness to about him
diversely
few things
also
learn children if we read that story.

Secondly
, Those
news papers
, Magazines are showing cinema celebrities on their front page
only
for improving their rating. No Matter there,
but
they publish silly things such as what they eat, where they go that not essential to them. I am not saying all cinema celebrates
some
are there, even
Tv
serials,
small
screen
people
also
they
show
. Youth may divert to unnecessary things that was the best for our society.
Often
some
pics
also
we cannot
see
if we sit with the children.

I
have to
go the conclusion,
Newpapers
, Magazines are public servants that should give awareness to everyone about strong
people
who sacrifice their
life
. If you publish for
famous
people
it will be useful to the academy.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Many newspapers and magazines feature stories about the private lives of famous people. We know what they eat, where they buy their clothes and who they love. We also often see pictures of them in private situations. Is it appropriate for a magazine or newspaper to give this kind of private information about people? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
6
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