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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, but not local people. Why this is the case? What can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v.5

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, but not local people. Why this is the case? What can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v. 5
Nowadays, plenty of local museums and historical places are mostly visited by foreign tourists as compared to the local community. This is mainly because of high ticket prices and the lack of new developments. However, active measures could be taken to alleviate this issue which will be discussed in this essay. Firstly, the local community gets bored by visiting the same local museums and seeing similar historical places. For instance, Taxila museum which is located near Engineering university was developed in the 20th century. No new developments have been made since its development. People are offered with same old facilities every time they visit the museum therefore, local residents avoid visiting Taxila museum due to lack of new services. Secondly, local tourists mainly have to buy the tickets at the same price at which foreigners purchase. A good illustration is that all the visitors visiting historical places in Lahore will have to pay the equal amount of money no matter if the person is local or foreigner. Despite having issues the above-prescribed problem could be mitigated easily. One of the effective solutions to tackle this problem is that the local museums should sell tickets to local people at a lower price than foreign tickets price, this would definitely enhance local tourism. Another productive precaution is that the local museums and historical buildings must be renovated. For example, new facilities should be provided to the visitor which will attract local visitors, as local visitors will find new interesting things to watch. In conclusion, although the absence of new facilities and higher ticket prices have restricted local people to visit museums and old site, these problems can be resolved by adopting the above-mentioned solutions.
Nowadays,
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historical
places are
mostly
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local
community. This is
mainly
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because
of high
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ticket
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prices
and the lack of
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new
developments.
However
, active measures could
be taken
to alleviate this issue which will
be discussed
in this essay.

Firstly
, the
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local
community
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gets
bored by visiting the same
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local
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museums
and seeing similar
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historical
places.
For instance
,
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Taxila
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museum
which
is located
near Engineering university
was developed
in the 20th century. No
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new
developments have
been made
since its development.
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are offered
with same
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old
facilities every time they visit the
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museum
therefore
,
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local
residents avoid visiting
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Taxila
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museum
due to lack of
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new
services.
Secondly
,
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local
tourists
mainly
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the
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tickets
at the same
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price
at which foreigners
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purchase
. A
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good
illustration is that all the
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visitors
visiting
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historical
places in Lahore will
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have to
pay the equal amount of money no matter if the person is
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local
or foreigner.

Despite having issues the above-prescribed problem could
be mitigated
easily
. One of the effective solutions to tackle this problem is that the
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local
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museums
should sell
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tickets
to
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local
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people
at a lower
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price
than foreign
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tickets
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price
, this would definitely enhance
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local
tourism. Another productive precaution is that the
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local
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museums
and
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historical
buildings
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must
be renovated
.
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,
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new
facilities should
be provided
to the
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visitor
which will attract
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local
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visitors
, as
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local
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visitors
will find
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new
interesting things to
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watch
.

In conclusion
, although the absence of
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new
facilities and higher
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ticket
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prices
have restricted
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local
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people
to visit
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museums
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
site, these problems can
be resolved
by adopting the above-mentioned solutions.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
46Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists, but not local people. Why this is the case? What can be done to attract more local people to visit these places? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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