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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v.11

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v. 11
There is no doubt that many traditional places and museums are attractive to all tourists, while a few local people visiting these places. There are several reasons for this situation. However, a few precautionary steps can help to resolve this situation to a large extent. The causes and the measures are explained in the ensuing paragraphs. There are several reasons behind the mentioned problem for less-active in visiting historical places and museums by native people than foreigners. Out of all causes, the most common is that citizens do not want to see these places again because they have been growing up in their regions and have been studying for a long time. Therefore, locals already have visited galleries and historical sites. Thus, local people, neither want to spend more money nor time. Furthermore, Native people have been following a similar trend to visit challenging and exciting locations. Consequently, individuals are less interested in the nearest places. For instance, as per the survey of UNESCO, more than 4 million tourists visited the Taj Mahal last year while about 1 million by locals. However, every problem has seeds of solution within it. Besides, this problem can be solved by implementing various measures. To begin with, for attracting native citizens, the government should promote the importance of historical value through various sources such as social media, newspapers, and campaigns. Apart from this, offering some free tickets or discounts for native people is another measure to stimulate people. It not only can increase the number of native people to visit historical sites, but it also can boost the economy of a community. For example, in terms of promoting native culture, the Gujarat government offering discounts to visit the statue of unity. To conclude, the familiarities of locals with their own culture and curiosity of visiting adventure places make it difficult to promote and attract many native to local areas. However, with some campaigns and deduction in fees, it could boost the number of local visitors.
There is no doubt that
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many
traditional
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places
and museums are attractive to all tourists, while a few
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local
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people
visiting these
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places
. There are several reasons for this situation.
However
, a few precautionary steps can
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help
to resolve this situation to a large extent. The causes and the measures are
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explained
in the ensuing paragraphs.

There are several reasons behind the mentioned problem for less-active in visiting
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historical
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places
and museums by
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native
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people
than foreigners. Out of all causes, the most common is that citizens do not want to
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see
these
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places
again
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because
they have been growing up in their regions and have been studying for a long time.
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,
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locals
already have visited galleries and
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historical
sites.
Thus
,
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local
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people
, neither want to spend more money nor time.
Furthermore
,
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Native
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people
have been following a similar trend to visit challenging and exciting locations.
Consequently
, individuals are less interested in the nearest
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places
.
For instance
, as per the survey of UNESCO, more than 4 million tourists visited the Taj Mahal last year while about 1 million by locals.

However
, every problem has seeds of solution within it.
Besides
, this problem can
be solved
by implementing various measures. To
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begin
with, for attracting
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native
citizens, the
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government
should promote the importance of
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historical
value through various sources such as social media, newspapers, and campaigns. Apart from this, offering
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some
free tickets or discounts for
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native
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people
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is
another measure to stimulate
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people
. It not
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only
can increase the number of
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native
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people
to visit
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historical
sites,
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but
it
also
can boost the economy of a community.
For example
, in terms of promoting
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native
culture, the Gujarat
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government
offering discounts to visit the
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statue
of unity.

To conclude
, the
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familiarities
of
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locals
with their
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own
culture and curiosity of visiting adventure
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places
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make
it difficult to promote and attract
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many
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native
to
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local
areas.
However
, with
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some
campaigns and deduction in fees, it could boost the number of
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local
visitors.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is this the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
331 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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