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Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is it the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v.10

Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is it the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v. 10
These days, the most frequent visitors in museums and historical sites are tourists rather than indigenous people. Myriads of factors work behind this situation, which could be resolved by governments and authorities of the cultural sites. To begin with, the local visitors are indifferent to roam around their own historical places as well as museums or art galleries. This is because they find it quite unattractive, since they do not discover any new refurbishments. For example, in Lal Bag Kella, in Dhaka, in Bangladesh, all the sculptures and the ancient history inscribed on the walls have been collapsed due to the absence of modern restoration, which locals, eventually, might think as a waste of time visiting such a place. Furthermore, tourists who do not know about the historical fact of any monuments, they desire to see such buildings, which have historical interests but not the people of residential areas. Therefore, these are the factors which instigate tourists spend plenty of money on visiting ancient places and museums instead of local individuals. In contrast, since local people have no interest in their local art and crafts, governments and authorities should take a necessary step to resolve this problem. Firstly, the bureaucrats of the country have to announce free entry in museums and historical sites in each special occasion. For instance, the national museum of Bangladesh opens the whole day in the holiday when disabled, young and older people come to visit this place so that they gain proper knowledge about history, art, and artistic design. Moreover, the historical places ought to be made an essential change which could, consequently, help to allure local visitors without thinking that they are squandering money. Thus, entrepreneurs can apply these methods to attract local people. In conclusion, foreign people would love to visit the local museums and historical places in the native countries, while local people do not like visiting such places because of boredoms in looking same scenarios, which could be solved by not asking entry fee in parts of the year and restoring the ancient monuments.
These days, the most frequent visitors in
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museums
and
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historical
sites are tourists
rather
than indigenous
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people
. Myriads of factors work behind this situation, which could
be resolved
by
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governments
and authorities of the cultural sites.

To
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begin
with, the
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local
visitors are indifferent to roam around their
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own
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historical
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places
as well
as
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museums
or art galleries. This is
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because
they find it quite unattractive, since they do not discover any new refurbishments.
For example
, in
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Lal
Bag
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Kella
, in Dhaka, in Bangladesh, all the sculptures and the ancient history inscribed on the walls have
been collapsed
due to the absence of modern restoration, which
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locals
,
eventually
, might
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think
as a waste of time visiting such a
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place
.
Furthermore
, tourists who do not know about the
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historical
fact of any monuments, they desire to
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see
such buildings, which have
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historical
interests
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but
not the
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people
of residential areas.
Therefore
, these are the factors which instigate tourists spend
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plenty
of money on visiting ancient
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places
and
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museums
instead
of
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local
individuals.

In contrast
, since
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local
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people
have no interest in their
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local
art and crafts,
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governments
and authorities should take a necessary step to resolve this problem.
Firstly
, the bureaucrats of the country
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have to
announce free entry in
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museums
and
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historical
sites in each special occasion.
For instance
, the national
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museum
of Bangladesh opens the whole day in the holiday when disabled, young and older
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people
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come
to visit this
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place
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so
that they gain proper knowledge about history, art, and artistic design.
Moreover
, the
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historical
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places
ought to
be made
an essential
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change
which could,
consequently
,
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help
to allure
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local
visitors without thinking that they are squandering money.
Thus
, entrepreneurs can apply these methods to attract
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local
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people
.

In conclusion
, foreign
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people
would
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love
to visit the
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local
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museums
and
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historical
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places
in the native countries, while
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local
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people
do not like visiting such
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places
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because
of
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boredoms
in looking same scenarios, which could
be solved
by not asking entry fee in parts of the year and restoring the ancient monuments.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many museums and historical sites are mainly visited by tourists but not local people. Why is it the case? What can be done to attract local people to visit these places? v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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