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Nowadays, International Tourism is one of the biggest industries in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. v.1

Nowadays, International Tourism is one of the biggest industries in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion. v. 1
It seems that the international tourism business is at its peak in today life as more and more people travel overseas each year. This phenomenon leads to an argument that such improvement has created tautness between local inhabitants and foreigners instead of understanding, while others argue in reverse. In my opinion, I firmly agree with the former notion due to different living habit, language barrier, and rejection by some indigenous dwellers. Needless to say, the development of today lives has caused the ease of travelling abroad. This causes global tourism becoming the largest industry all around the globe. Inevitably, this alteration leads to inadequate term among people from different cultures. The distinction of lifestyle sometimes causes tension among these individuals since they will judge at each other as a result of a misunderstanding. For example, the way of western people dressing –revealed clothes- is totally unacceptable in some countries like the middle-east. For so some, such action represents disrespectful behaviour for local culture. In the end, tension or misunderstanding is a matter that can be avoided. Apart from the previous discussion, one of the obstacles that are often faced by native and foreigners are in terms of communication due to different languages. Language barrier leads to mis-communication that often ends up as a clash between two sides. Moreover, in some areas, there are local people who look at comers negatively because of their past history. This creates tension since natives show unpleasant feeling to visitors. For instance, in Bangladesh, some elderlies attitude toward Pakistani tourists. They often show rejection to such people since Pakistan colonized Bangladesh in the bygone era. Seeing Pakistan probably brings past trauma to elders. In conclusion, it is clear that global tourism produces misunderstanding instead of friendship between visitors and local occupants due to the differences in living habits, language, and unwilling by some groups.
It seems that the international tourism business is at its peak in
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today
life as more and more
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people
travel overseas each year. This phenomenon leads to an argument that such improvement has created tautness between
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local
inhabitants and foreigners
instead
of understanding, while others argue in reverse. In my opinion, I
firmly
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agree
with the former notion due to
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different
living habit,
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language
barrier, and rejection by
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some
indigenous dwellers.

Needless to say, the development of
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today
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lives
has caused the
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ease
of travelling abroad. This causes global tourism becoming the largest industry all around the globe.
Inevitably
, this alteration leads to inadequate term among
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people
from
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different
cultures. The distinction of lifestyle
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sometimes
causes tension among these individuals since they will judge at each other
as a result
of a misunderstanding.
For example
, the way of western
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people
dressing –revealed clothes- is
totally
unacceptable in
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some
countries like the middle-east. For
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so
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some
, such action represents disrespectful
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behaviour
for
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local
culture. In the
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end
, tension or misunderstanding is a matter that can
be avoided
.

Apart from the previous discussion, one of the obstacles that are
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often
faced by native and foreigners are in terms of communication due to
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different
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languages
.
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Language
barrier leads to
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mis-communication
that
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often
ends up as a clash between two sides.
Moreover
, in
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some
areas, there are
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local
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people
who look at comers
negatively
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because
of their past history. This creates tension since natives
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show
unpleasant feeling to visitors.
For instance
, in Bangladesh,
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some
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elderlies
attitude toward Pakistani tourists. They
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often
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show
rejection to such
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people
since Pakistan colonized Bangladesh in the bygone era. Seeing Pakistan
probably
brings past trauma to elders.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that global tourism produces misunderstanding
instead
of friendship between visitors and
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local
occupants due to the differences in living habits,
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language
, and unwilling by
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
groups.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Nowadays, International Tourism is one of the biggest industries in the world. Unfortunately, it creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. with this opinion. v. 1

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4 paragraphs
309 words
8.5
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