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Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.6

Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. v. 6
Teenage is considered an important phase where the decisions are taken and actions are performed out of emotions and external influences. Under such circumstances, there has been a consistent argument among the people, whether the youngsters should listen to the adults or think it is common to contradict with the views of matured people. In my opinion, teenagers need not listen to the advice of the adults all the time, but, an appropriate consideration should be given to the advice provided by the experienced persons. On the one side of the argument, adopting the benchmarks set by the matured-people is considered highly essential as it would prevent committing avoidable mistakes. Adults have already passed through the teenage and they know what are the emotions and thoughts people go through at that stage of life. Moreover, youngsters who had taken guidance from wiser people, mostly came out successful in different streams of their careers. For instance, the influence of coaches has been substantial in developing the game and mental strength of the adolescents. Hence, the advice and wisdom of the older people should be adopted. On the other side, there are people who consider that challenging the opinions of the older generation is absolutely fine. People with this view strongly believe that out of questioning the existing knowledge will be upgraded and this sort of mindset should always be encouraged from a young age. For example, the learning process is far better in schools where the children are free to contradict anything they feel inappropriate. Thus, it is explained why questioning the thoughts of previous timelines would be constructive to the growth of the younger generation. To summarize, it is understood why the younger generation needs to take the learnings of mature people and at the same time the need for challenging the view points of the experienced persons. To conclude, I would say that the wisdom of the people from past timelines should be given importance and if there are any issues in the ideologies or beliefs, it is good to question.
Teenage
is considered
an
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important
phase where the decisions
are taken
and actions
are performed
out of emotions and external influences. Under such circumstances, there has been a consistent argument among the
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people
, whether the youngsters should listen to the adults or
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think
it is common to contradict with the views of matured
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people
. In my opinion,
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teenagers
need not listen to the advice of the adults all the time,
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but
, an appropriate consideration should be
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given
to the advice provided by the experienced persons.

On the one side of the argument, adopting the benchmarks set by the matured-
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people
is considered
highly
essential as it would
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prevent
committing avoidable mistakes. Adults have already passed through the
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teenage and
they know what are the emotions and thoughts
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people
go through at that stage of life.
Moreover
, youngsters who had taken guidance from wiser
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people
,
mostly
came out successful in
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different
streams of their careers.
For instance
, the influence of coaches has been substantial in developing the game and mental strength of the adolescents.
Hence
, the advice and wisdom of the older
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people
should
be adopted
.

On the other side, there are
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people
who consider that challenging the opinions of the older generation is
absolutely
fine.
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People
with this view
strongly
believe that out of questioning the existing knowledge will
be upgraded
and this sort of mindset should always
be encouraged
from a young age.
For example
, the learning process is far better in schools where the children are free to contradict anything they feel inappropriate.
Thus
, it is
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explained
why questioning the thoughts of previous timelines would be constructive to the growth of the younger generation.

To summarize
, it
is understood
why the younger generation needs to take the learnings of mature
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people
and at the same time the need for challenging the view points of the experienced persons.
To conclude
, I would say that the wisdom of the
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people
from past timelines should be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
importance and if there are any issues in the ideologies or beliefs, it is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
to question.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people think that teenagers should follow the example of older people. Others think that it is natural for teenagers to challenge what older people say. v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
342 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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