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Many management interviews are based around assessing not only a person’s level of experience and knowledge but also their personality. v.1

Many management interviews are based around assessing not only a person’s level of experience and knowledge but also their personality. v. 1
It is argued that people spend a significant part of their life for their jobs and job satisfaction is required an individual development. I will discuss the key factors that contribute to the job satisfaction and the expectation of the employees. To begin with, there are many ways to get job satisfactions. First of all, people should choose a job which matches with their skills and they could find mental satisfaction. A job, according to skill also should develop the experience of the employees. For instance, improving skill through training opportunities can make a sense of progression of the employees. In addition, the environment of the working place relates to job satisfaction because colleagues help each other to enjoy their working lives. Job satisfaction also increases the responsibility and loyalty in a team. 134 Everyone does not enjoy their jobs. At present time people have little opportunity to choice their works according to their skills and their majors. For example, nowadays many engineering students are working in banks. Some jobs are repetitive and boring, and labour relations with the executives are not well rather than job satisfaction. People also face difficulty in their job stability and feels insecure in working place without job satisfaction. To conclude up, though job satisfaction is a significant element for the adult people to be wellbeing, but they do not get the facilities from the employers in their life. Hence, I think that increasing job satisfaction can assist to develop an individual and the economy of a country.
It
is argued
that
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people
spend a significant part of their life for their
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jobs
and
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job
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satisfaction
is required
an individual development. I will discuss the key factors that contribute to the
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job
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satisfaction
and the expectation of the employees.

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begin
with, there are
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many
ways to
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get
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job
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satisfactions
.
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First of all
,
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people
should choose a
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job
which matches with their
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skills and
they could find mental
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satisfaction
. A
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job
, according to
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skill
also
should develop the experience of the employees.
For instance
, improving
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skill
through training opportunities can
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make
a sense of progression of the employees.
In addition
, the environment of the
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working
place relates to
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job
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satisfaction
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because
colleagues
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help
each other to enjoy their
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working
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lives
.
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Job
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satisfaction
also
increases the responsibility and loyalty in a team. 134

Everyone does not enjoy their
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jobs
. At present time
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people
have
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little
opportunity to choice their works according to their
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skills
and their majors.
For example
, nowadays
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many
engineering students are
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working
in banks.
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Some
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jobs
are repetitive and boring, and
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labour
relations with the executives are not well
rather
than
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job
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satisfaction
.
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People
also
face difficulty in their
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job
stability and feels insecure in
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working
place without
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job
satisfaction.

To conclude
up, though
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job
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satisfaction
is a significant element for the adult
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people
to be
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wellbeing
,
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but
they do not
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get
the facilities from the employers in their life.
Hence
, I
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think
that increasing
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job
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satisfaction
can assist to develop an individual and the economy of a country.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many management interviews are based around assessing not only a person’s level of experience and knowledge but also their personality. v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
253 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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