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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.31

Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 31
The authority has been certainly trying to improvise the nation in various sectors. However, some governs are only giving focus on the economy grows as people standard of living will improve, while others give attention to the growth in the agriculture, education ultimately helps in the economic growth. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs. To begin with, the foremost reason is that money would be considered as a key parameter to buy necessary products. That’s why the government who has good funds available can get the respect from another nation. Even they always get the priorities between many nations. Moreover, people in that nation can live their life fearlessly as no one will think to do a criminal attack on them. For example, America, would be considered as a wealthy nation, as no one will try to spoil the relation with them, even no country would think to start the war with them. On the other hand, there are few regimes who are focusing on the various sectors for their growth. One of the crucial parameters is the agriculture, this is the basic need of everyone. They will use this for their food and earn money by exporting it to another nation. Furthermore, providing the best education can also give an opportunity to an individual’s growth. Having professional skills would help to raise the economy of the nation. For instance, America, can raise their economy by exposing other sector such as agriculture, education. In conclusion, by having money the government can give secure life to their citizen, even to earn that they should start to improvise a various part. As per my opinion, the economic growth and other sector growth are equally important.
The authority has been
certainly
trying to improvise the
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nation
in various
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sectors
.
However
,
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some
governs are
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only
giving focus on the economy grows as
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people
standard of living will
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improve
, while others give attention to the
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growth
in the agriculture, education
ultimately
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helps
in the economic
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growth
. The essay will discuss my stance with arguments in below paragraphs.

To
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begin
with, the foremost reason is that money would
be considered
as a key parameter to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
necessary products. That’s why the
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government
who has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
funds available can
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get
the respect from another
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nation
. Even they always
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get
the priorities between
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many
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nations
.
Moreover
,
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people
in that
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nation
can
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live
their life
fearlessly
as no one will
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think
to do a criminal attack on them.
For example
, America, would
be considered
as a wealthy
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nation
, as no one will try to spoil the relation with them, even no country would
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think
to
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start
the war with them.

On the
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other
hand, there are few regimes who are focusing on the various
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sectors
for their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
. One of the crucial parameters is the agriculture, this is the basic need of everyone. They will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
this for their food and earn money by exporting it to another
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nation
.
Furthermore
, providing the best education can
also
give an opportunity to an individual’s
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
growth
. Having professional
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to raise the economy of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
nation
.
For instance
, America, can raise their economy by exposing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
such as agriculture, education.

In conclusion
, by having money the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
can give secure life to their citizen, even to earn that they should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
to improvise a various part. As per my opinion, the economic
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growth
and
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other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
sector
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growth
are
equally
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important
.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 31

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
288 words
8.5
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