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Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? v.5

Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? v. 5
In the modern era, technology is developing significantly. Some people consider that robots are vital to the human future development, whereas others think machines bring negative influence on the society. In my opinion, I believe that robots are essential for people’s planned development, while they have negative impacts in some way. Technology developments, in other words, robots, they have important to our subsequent. Robots can do any kind of manufacturing task if scientists build and code them. Moreover, machines produce more efficient job in a short period of time, so they save time and it is good for company’s economy. To illustrate, over 60 percent of industry done by robots in Japanese renowned car company Toyota. Other people, however, think that machines are not safe and can lead to negative effects on the social fabric. If there are too many robots work in manufacturing or other job action, there will be shortage of job for human. Furthermore, another drawback of dominating robots is they could be developed high and want to control human beings. In my opinion, robots have a vital involvement to our subsequent development for the reason that robots could do jobs that people cannot. Take one example, robots are important for scientific research such as outer space research, they can work without air and water. Thus, only people need to control them in an optimal level. In conclusion, developing future depends on either human and robots. People should learn to control them in high level and use them as much as possible in order to build a greater future for human beings.
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significantly
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people
consider that robots are vital to the
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human
future
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development
, whereas others
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think
machines bring
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negative
influence on the society. In my opinion, I believe that robots are essential for
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people’s
planned
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development
, while they have
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negative
impacts in
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some
way.

Technology
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developments
,
in other words
, robots, they have
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important
to our subsequent. Robots can do any kind of manufacturing task if scientists build and code them.
Moreover
, machines produce more efficient
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job
in a short period of time,
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so
they save time and it is
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good
for
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company
’s economy. To illustrate, over 60 percent of industry done by robots in Japanese renowned car
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company
Toyota.

Other
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people
,
however
,
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think
that machines are not safe and can lead to
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negative
effects on the social fabric. If there are too
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many
robots work in manufacturing or other
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job
action, there will be shortage of
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job
for
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human
.
Furthermore
, another drawback of dominating robots is they could
be developed
high and want to control
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human
beings.

In my opinion, robots have a vital involvement to our subsequent
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development
for the reason that robots could do
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jobs
that
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people
cannot. Take one example, robots are
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important
for scientific research such as outer space research, they can work without air and water.
Thus
,
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only
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people
need to control them in an optimal level.

In conclusion
, developing future depends on either
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human
and robots.
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People
should learn to control them in high level and
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use
them as much as possible in order to build a greater future for
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human
beings.
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IELTS essay Some teachers think that international student exchange would be beneficial for all teenage school students. Do you think its advantages will outweigh the disadvantages? v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
265 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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