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Many governments think that economic progress is their most goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.2

Many governments think that economic progress is their most goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 2
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for things like books, air tickets, and groceries is becoming
increasingly
common. Although there are
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some
drawbacks to
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, the advantages are
significantly
greater. The
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dangers
of
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shopping
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online
include scams and theft,
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these
are outweighed
by the incredible convenience of
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shopping
online.

Scams and theft are the main
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of
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online
.
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people
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use
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to trick
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people
.
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, elderly
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people
who are not aware of scams
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online
may be more likely to
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purchase
something from a fake website or give their bank account information to a thief pretending to be an employee of the bank.

The advantages of
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online
exceed the potential
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dangers
.
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online
is the most convenient way to find what you want and with a
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little bit
of caution, you can
easily
avoid scammers and thieves on the Internet and
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from one of the
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reputable
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online
businesses.
For instance
, when
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for air tickets or books, going
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online
gives you access to a much wider range of choices
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so
you can find a better deal without wasting time at a travel agents office.
In addition
,
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shopping
for groceries
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online
saves time by avoiding waiting in line at the supermarket.
Moreover
, it is easy to verify if a website is legitimate nowadays with a quick google search.

In conclusion
, it is
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clear
that the
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dangers
of
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shopping
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online
are insignificant compared to the benefits.
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Online
scams and theft can
easily
be avoided
with a
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little bit
of caution and the remarkable convenience of
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online
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cannot be
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
270 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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