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Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown are or out of season. Some people think this is a positive development, but others believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified v.1

Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown are or out of season. Some people think this is a positive development, but others believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified v. 1
To catch up with the speed pace of modern life, a huge number of people prefer spending time on the practice fields in terms of science and business to the conventional aspects of life, such as painting or music. From my perspective, there are various causalities of this phenomenon; however, some effective efficacies could take into consideration to intrigue people to the retro values. When it comes to the preference for science and business, it plays an irreplaceable role in meeting the basic subsistence, then fostering the permanent development of a certain nation. The plain truth is that if people make a decision to earning for living with the ignorance of high-tech gizmos, they will not be affordable to maintain their mundane living. For example, there is an inclination that a massive number of cutting-edge companies do require the knowledgeable employees who can run the automatic assembly line and solve the mechanical problems instead of blue-collar workers. Due to the fact that the technological innovation helps businesses to produce more productive output, as a result, leading to the increase in the total returning revenue. Albeit the convenience of profoundly positive changes in science-based businesses, there are various ways to restore a great level of the art attraction among our community. Firstly, governments should run campaigns to raise the awareness of citizens about the intrinsic values hidden in works of art. By carrying out this action, the underlying interesting traits, such as meaning or story, would enable a large body of smart people to obtain the deeper insight into these artistic objects, then, catch their eyeballs. Secondly, holding competition to make presentation about famous masterpieces with the high award is also of the utmost importance. This, in turn, might not only offer opportunities for participants, especially art lovers, but also arouse the viewers’ curiosity and concern. As aforementioned explanations, we cannot hamper the priority on these such fields from the emergency, we could solely take some actions, which are mentioned above, get art-based fascination back.
To catch up with the speed pace of modern life, a huge number of
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people
prefer spending time on the practice fields in terms of science and
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business
to the conventional aspects of life, such as painting or music. From my perspective, there are various causalities of this phenomenon;
however
,
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some
effective
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efficacies
could take into consideration to intrigue
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people
to the retro values.

When it
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comes
to the preference for science and
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business
, it plays an irreplaceable role in meeting the basic subsistence, then fostering the permanent development of a certain nation. The plain truth is that if
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people
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a decision to earning for living with the ignorance of high-tech gizmos, they will not be affordable to maintain their mundane living.
For example
, there is an inclination that a massive number of cutting-edge
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
do require the knowledgeable employees who can run the automatic assembly line and solve the mechanical problems
instead
of blue-collar workers. Due to the fact that the technological innovation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helps
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
businesses
to produce more productive output,
as a result
, leading to the increase in the total returning revenue.

Albeit the convenience of
profoundly
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positive
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changes
in science-based
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
businesses
, there are various ways to restore a great level of the art attraction among our community.
Firstly
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
governments
should run campaigns to raise the awareness of citizens about the intrinsic values hidden in works of art. By carrying out this action, the underlying interesting traits, such as meaning or story, would enable a large body of smart
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to obtain the deeper insight into these artistic objects, then, catch their eyeballs.
Secondly
, holding competition to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
presentation about
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
famous
masterpieces with the high award is
also
of the utmost importance. This, in turn, might not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
offer opportunities for participants,
especially
art lovers,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
also
arouse the viewers’ curiosity and concern.

As aforementioned explanations, we cannot hamper the priority on these such fields from the emergency, we could
solely
take
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
actions, which
are mentioned
above,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
art-based fascination back.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Air transport is increasingly used to export fruit and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown are or out of season. Some people think this is a positive development, but others believe the use of air transport for this purpose is not justified v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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