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Many governments think that economic progress is their most goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.1

Many governments think that economic progress is their most goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 1
Governments of all over the world have an idea to increase their economics and also thought to make it as a primary goal. Whenever we have an idea there always some people who have a different idea. Likewise, For their country few people to show equal importance in some other types of progress. Instead of sticking to the one thought, we can see these two ideas and have a detailed view of this essay. Nowadays, world countries are fighting to improve their economic status because of the economic variance between their neighbour nations. Even though they are a well-developed nation, These developed countries want to sustain their position which had a strong wealth and economic background. If we come to a developing nation whom fighting to possess a wealthy nation's position, they want to improvise their economic status, which to be the main goal for their budget plan in their administrations. For example, In India, The finance minister had come up with many schemes to heighten the self-employment and also helps to start the new business. Likewise, many developing countries were fixed their main goal to enhance their economic status. On contrary to the above discussion, Few Administrators have other areas to progress in their country all with their expert's opinion along with their people's needy things. Although these nations focus on some other areas like poverty, famine, the basic needs of people, etc. , which can heighten people's life along with their economic status. Their primary goal is not to participate in the world economic war, but they had another thing to concentrate on which fulfils their people's daily needs. Countries like Africa had many important problems that their government needs to work like food, water, education, etc. , which led them to go on with the solution to solve these things. In concluding, Some countries fighting with other countries to achieve a top position among the world countries to show their power and status. On the other hand, Few countries trying to fulfil their people's daily needs.
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idea
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economics
and
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thought
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make
it as a primary
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goal
.
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few
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show
equal importance in
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other
types of progress.
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of sticking to the one
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thought
, we can
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see
these two
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ideas
and have a detailed view of this essay.

Nowadays,
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world
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countries
are fighting to
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improve
their
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economic
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status
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because
of the
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economic
variance between their
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neighbour
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nations
.
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they are a well-developed
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nation
, These developed
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countries
want to sustain their position which had a strong wealth and
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economic
background. If we
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come
to a developing
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nation
whom fighting to possess a wealthy nation's position, they want to improvise their
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economic
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status
, which to be the main
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goal
for their budget plan in their administrations.
For example
, In India, The finance minister had
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come
up with
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many
schemes to heighten the self-employment and
also
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helps
to
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start
the new business.
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,
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many
developing
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countries
were
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fixed
their main
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goal
to enhance their
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economic
status.

On contrary to the above discussion, Few Administrators have
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other
areas to progress in their
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country
all with their expert's opinion along with their
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people's
needy things. Although these
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nations
focus on
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some
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other
areas like poverty, famine, the basic
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needs
of
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people
, etc.
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which can heighten
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people's
life along with their
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economic
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status
. Their primary
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goal
is not to participate in the
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world
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economic
war,
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they had another thing to concentrate on which
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fulfils
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people's
daily
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needs
.
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Countries
like Africa had
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important
problems that their
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government
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needs
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,
which led them to go on with the solution to solve these things.

In concluding,
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fighting with
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countries
to achieve a top position among the
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world
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countries
to
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show
their power and
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status
. On the
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other
hand, Few
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countries
trying to fulfil their
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people's
daily
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needs
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51Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many governments think that economic progress is their most goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
339 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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