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Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art, which helps to improve the quality of people’s lives. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. Do you agree or disagree? v.4

Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art, which helps to improve the quality of people’s lives. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. v. 4
Societies with a heritage in the ‘arts’ have long been considered culturally sophisticated and advanced. However, with the recent financial crisis this lavishness and expense should be questioned. Tax-payers’ money has to be spent practically rather than on cultural endeavours. Firstly, not everyone in society appreciates art, and, secondly, employment should take precedence. Art can bring quality into one’s life if you are interested. In society, art-lovers are typically in the minority, and other activities, such as sport, are more popular. Take football, for example. Across the globe it is obvious that there are more people watching matches in stadiums than looking at sculptures or paintings. This fact shows that it is impossible for art to bring quality into a community if galleries hold little interest for the people. Secondly, the resources diverted to such projects come from the public and should be spent in a way that benefits them. Commissioning or purchasing art is an insult to tax-payers who endure high unemployment, such as those in Newcastle, UK. This city suffers from historically high unemployment, yet the council commissioned a large sculpture called ‘The Angel of the North’. Financing a job creation project would undoubtedly have been more practical for the local community. To conclude, I believe that it is an untrue to assert that art brings quality into one’s life and I agree that the money should be spent elsewhere. This is because art expenditure only benefits a small minority and the expense involved should benefit the majority. Ideally in the future, governments will recognise that the quality of a person’s life derives from a decent opportunity in life, not a sculpture.
Societies with a heritage in the
‘arts’
have long
been considered
culturally
sophisticated and advanced.
However
, with the recent financial crisis this lavishness and expense should
be questioned
. Tax-payers’ money
has to
be spent
practically
rather
than on cultural
endeavours
.
Firstly
, not everyone in society appreciates
art
, and,
secondly
, employment should take precedence.

Art can bring
quality
into one’s
life
if you
are interested
. In society, art-lovers are
typically
in the minority, and other activities, such as sport, are more popular. Take football,
for example
. Across the globe it is obvious that there are more
people
watching matches in stadiums than looking at sculptures or paintings. This fact
shows
that it is impossible for
art
to bring
quality
into a community if galleries hold
little
interest for the
people
.

Secondly
, the resources diverted to such projects
come
from the public and should
be spent
in a way that benefits them. Commissioning or purchasing
art
is an insult to tax-payers who endure high unemployment, such as those in Newcastle, UK. This city suffers from
historically
high unemployment,
yet
the council commissioned a large sculpture called ‘The Angel of the North’. Financing a job creation project would
undoubtedly
have been more practical for the local community.

To conclude
, I believe that it is an untrue to assert that
art
brings
quality
into one’s
life
and I
agree
that the money should
be spent
elsewhere. This is
because
art
expenditure
only
benefits a
small
minority and the expense involved should benefit the majority.
Ideally
in the future,
governments
will
recognise
that the
quality
of a person’s
life
derives from a decent opportunity in
life
, not a sculpture.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Many governments in the world spend large amounts of money on art, which helps to improve the quality of people’s lives. However, governments should spend money on other things rather than art. v. 4

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