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Many goverments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. v.3

Many goverments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 3
Nowadays, the world is witnessing the dramatic development of many countries, especially in economic field. It is said that the most essential purpose of a nation is the developed economic progress. Others believe that progresses of other fields play equal roles as economy. In my opinion, I agree with the latter statement. On the one hand, flourish economy can bring about many benefits. Strong economy can provide a country ability to improve facilities, infrastructure and so on which can lead to the situation that living standard of citizens can be improved. For example, in developed economy, there will be a great deal of employment as well as the refurbishment of the hospitals and transport system. Moreover, the strength of economic conditions can emphasize the position of a countries in international scale which can bring about many opportunities for more flourish economy and stable national security. Therefore, economic development is one of the most essential parts of a country. On the other hand, there are other fields that play balanced role as economy which support the development of economy in the best conditions. First and foremost, balancing the society is another part that countries should take into consideration. Narrowing the gap between the poor and the rich, guarantee the internal security of a nation and preventing the bad news released by reactionary organizations from citizens and so on are the necessary measures need the attraction of governments which can surely be solved radically by a great deal of money. Another point, investing in education is the key process of a nation for long-term improvement. This process can guarantee the ability of future leaders and individuals to manage and contribute for the nation in the next years. In conclusion, although economic development brings about many positive aspects, other process like society and education should be taken into accounts for sustainable evolution of a country.
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development
of
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many
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countries
,
especially
in
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economic
field. It
is said
that the most essential purpose of a
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nation
is the developed
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economic
progress. Others believe that progresses of
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other
fields play equal roles as
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economy
. In my opinion, I
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agree
with the latter statement.

On the one hand, flourish
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economy
can bring about
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many
benefits. Strong
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economy
can provide a
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country
ability to
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improve
facilities, infrastructure and
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so
on which can lead to the situation that living standard of citizens can be
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improved
.
For example
, in developed
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economy
, there will be a great deal of employment
as well
as the refurbishment of the hospitals and transport system.
Moreover
, the strength of
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economic
conditions can emphasize the position of a
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countries
in international scale which can bring about
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many
opportunities for more flourish
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economy
and stable national security.
Therefore
,
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economic
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development
is one of the most essential parts of a country.

On the
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other
hand, there are
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other
fields that play balanced role as
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economy
which support the
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development
of
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economy
in the best conditions.
First
and foremost, balancing the society is another part that
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countries
should take into consideration. Narrowing the gap between the poor and the rich, guarantee the internal security of a
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nation
and preventing the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
news released by reactionary organizations from citizens and
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so
on are the necessary measures need the attraction of
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governments
which can
surely
be solved
radically
by a great deal of money. Another point, investing in education is the key process of a
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nation
for long-term improvement. This process can guarantee the ability of future leaders and individuals to manage and contribute for the
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nation
in the
next
years.

In conclusion
, although
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economic
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development
brings about
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many
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positive
aspects,
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other
process like society and education should
be taken
into accounts for sustainable evolution of a
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country
.
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29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Many goverments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. v. 3

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