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Many favourite athletes advertise different products. what are the advantage and disadvantages of this. v.1

Many favourite athletes advertise different products. what are the advantage and disadvantages of this. v. 1
The use of Aeroplanes has been increased to transfer produce to countries where they are impossible to be grown or are out of season. While it cost too much to import vegetables and fruits by air, these are antidotes of many diseases that can be cured by them. The primary drawback of importing produce by air is that it takes too much money to deliver the goods to its destination. That is to say that Airplanes fuel cost is much higher than the other means of transport, such as rail or ship. For example, Avocado cost three times more than in Pakistan than to its original cost in the United States of America. The main benefit of importing produce from other countries is that they reach within much less time around the globe. This is because Airplanes take much less time as compared to ships or trucks and because they reach in less time so the chances are higher that it will be delivered in the same condition as they were in the home country. Furthermore, some of these vegetables work as a medicine for some people who face heart or other health issues. So importing them by Airplanes takes less time to reach to the patient who needs them to cure their disease. For instance, a recent report from the University of Karachi revealed that Brooklyn is good for those people who are facing depression problems because it gives strength to the brain to tackle the problems of life. In conclusion, although importing vegetables and fruits from different countries by air cost too much, it is really helpful for those who need them to save their lives.
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use
of
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Aeroplanes
has
been increased
to transfer produce to
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countries
where they are impossible to
be grown
or are out of season. While it
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cost
too
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much
to import vegetables and fruits by air, these are antidotes of
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many
diseases that can
be cured
by them.

The primary drawback of
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importing
produce by air is that it takes too
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much
money to deliver the
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goods
to its destination.
That is
to say that Airplanes fuel
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cost
is
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much
higher than the other means of transport, such as rail or ship.
For example
, Avocado
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cost
three
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times
more than in Pakistan than to its original
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cost
in the United States of America.

The main benefit of
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importing
produce from other
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countries
is that they reach within
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much
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less
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time
around the globe. This is
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because
Airplanes take
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much
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less
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time
as compared to ships or trucks and
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because
they reach in
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less
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time
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so
the chances are higher that it will
be delivered
in the same condition as they were in the home
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country
.
Furthermore
,
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some
of these vegetables work as a medicine for
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some
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people
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who
face heart or other health issues.
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So
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importing
them by Airplanes takes
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less
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time
to reach to the patient
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who
needs them to cure their disease.
For instance
, a recent report from the University of Karachi revealed that Brooklyn is
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good
for those
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people
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who
are facing depression problems
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because
it gives strength to the brain to tackle the problems of life.

In conclusion
, although
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importing
vegetables and fruits from
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different
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countries
by air
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cost
too
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much
, it is
really
helpful for those
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who
need them to save their
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lives
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many favourite athletes advertise different products. what are the advantage and disadvantages of this. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
278 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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