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some people believe that learning a foreign language is a difficult task what are the most difficult things about learning a foreign language what is the best way to overcome them explain and include your personal experience or knowledge of this problem v.1

some people believe that learning a foreign language is a difficult task what are the most difficult things about learning a foreign language what is the best way to overcome them explain and include your personal experience or knowledge of this problem v. 1
It is believed that being a famous person, such as a well-known actor or a sports player, has disadvantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, being famous results in more problems for celebrities compared to any benefits it might bring. Admittedly, there are some advantages to being famous. Firstly, celebrities are known for their wealth, which is a result of their fame and lucrative jobs, namely acting, singing and sports playing. For instance, the well-known singer Taylor Swift gets around one million dollars for every event she participates in. Secondly, the majority of celebrities are welcomed everywhere without facing any visa-related issues. This is because many governments exempt celebrities from all visa requirements. To illustrate this, in April 2019, the Syrian actor Basil Kayat was given a visa to Egypt within 24 hours regardless of the recent law which states that the Syrians are not allowed to go to Egypt. Nevertheless, despite the advantages above, I think celebrities could face serious issues because of their fame. One annoying problem is that their privacy is always invaded by others. The reason behind this is that their fans are curious to know about their private lives and, therefore, most of them are followed by paparazzi everywhere. For example, a report by New York Times showed that the late actor, Marilyn Monroe used to hide at her home for weeks just to avoid photographers. Another possible issue is that the majority of famous people are surrounded by people who pretend to love them. In other words, a lot of famous people get divorced when they lose their wealth or decide to quit their lucrative jobs. For example, Abed Fahed is a very famous Syrian actor who got divorced after he lost his money and decided to quit acting. In conclusion, having no privacy and not being truly loved far outweigh any of the other advantages that could result from being a celebrity.
It
is believed
that being a
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famous
person, such as a well-known
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actor
or a sports player, has disadvantages and disadvantages. In my opinion, being
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famous
results in more problems for
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celebrities
compared to any benefits it might bring.

Admittedly
, there are
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some
advantages to being
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famous
.
Firstly
,
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celebrities
are known
for their wealth, which is a result of their fame and lucrative jobs,
namely
acting, singing and sports playing.
For instance
, the well-known singer Taylor Swift
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gets
around one million dollars for every
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event
she participates in.
Secondly
, the majority of
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celebrities
are welcomed
everywhere without facing any visa-related issues. This is
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because
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many
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governments
exempt
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celebrities
from all visa requirements. To illustrate this, in April 2019, the Syrian
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actor
Basil
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Kayat
was
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given
a visa to Egypt within 24 hours regardless of the recent law which states that the Syrians are not
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allowed
to go to Egypt.

Nevertheless
, despite the advantages above, I
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think
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celebrities
could face serious issues
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because
of their fame. One annoying problem is that their privacy is always invaded by others. The reason behind this is that their fans are curious to know about their private
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lives
and,
therefore
, most of them
are followed
by paparazzi everywhere.
For example
, a report by New York Times
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showed
that the late
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actor
, Marilyn Monroe
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used
to
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hide
at her home for weeks
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just
to avoid photographers. Another possible issue is that the majority of
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famous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are surrounded
by
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people
who pretend to
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love
them.
In other words
,
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a lot of
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famous
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people
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get
divorced when they lose their wealth or decide to quit their lucrative jobs.
For example
, Abed
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Fahed
is a
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very
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famous
Syrian
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actor
who
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got
divorced after he lost his money and decided to quit acting.

In conclusion
, having no privacy and not being
truly
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loved
far outweigh any of the other advantages that could result from being a
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celebrity
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay some people believe that learning a foreign language is a difficult task what are the most difficult things about learning a foreign language what is the best way to overcome them explain and include your personal experience or knowledge of this problem v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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