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Many environmental issues are the responsibility of rich nation not of poor nation Do you agree with this v.1

Many environmental issues are the responsibility of rich nation not of poor nation Do you agree with this v. 1
The ability to communicate in a foreign language is a very advantageous skill, which is believed by few experts to be taught from elementary school instead of secondary school. I am of the opinion that the merits of this idea outweighs the demerits with the following reasons to be discussed in this write up. Firstly, children have the tendency to learn anything faster than adolescent. This is because they have less distractions physically and emotionally as compared to teenagers in secondary schools, who have pubertal adaptations and self identity issues to deal with. For example, a 5 year old boy is only concerned with playing with toys, consuming his favourite meal and learning what he is being taught rather than being bothered about how he looks or dating a girl. He will likely have more time to concentrate and find his expression in the knowledge of the language being passed across to him. In addition, a child has more time to perfect his versatility in the new language he is being taught, he will have enough to converse within the school setting and be more excellent before being used in the outside world. For instance, a 4 year old girl, who was born in a small village in Nigeria but has been exposed to English language from her primary school days, she will be any communicator in English the moments were about to exist her last year in secondary school. This may not be so for a student who has had just 5year of learning The English language in secondary school. However, early acquisition of non-native language may lead to gradual alienation of the native or indigenous communication. This can be as a result of more concentration on foreign language learning. To illustrate, a 3year old boy that spends about 8hours in school daily, 5 times a week, and he is being taught a particular skill more than the other without understanding its consequence. He will likely be better at the initial language. This will be in contrast to a high school student who is already grounded in his native language but now adds a foreign one. In conclusion, although language learning is a very resourceful skill, at best learnt at a tender age, educators must exercise caution in ensuring it does not replace indigenous language which can lead to cultural abandonment.
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instead
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. I am of the opinion that the merits of this
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outweighs the demerits with the following reasons to
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less
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physically
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teenagers
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secondary
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schools
,
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who
have pubertal adaptations and self identity issues to deal with.
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year
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old
boy is
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concerned with playing with toys, consuming his
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meal and
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learning
what he is
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rather
than
being bothered
about how he looks or dating a girl. He will likely have more time to concentrate and find his expression in the knowledge of the
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language
being passed
across to him.

In addition
, a child has more time to perfect his versatility in the new
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language
he is
being taught
, he will have
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enough
to converse within the
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setting and be more excellent
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before
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used
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girl,
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was born
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small
village in Nigeria
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has
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from her primary
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days, she will be any communicator in English the moments were about to exist her last
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in
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school.

However
, early acquisition of non-native
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language
may lead to gradual alienation of the native or indigenous communication. This can be
as a result
of more concentration on foreign
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language
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learning
. To illustrate, a
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3year
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old
boy that spends about 8hours in
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daily, 5 times a week, and he is
being taught
a particular
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skill
more than the other without understanding its consequence. He will likely be better at the initial
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language
. This will be
in contrast
to a high
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school
student
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who
is already grounded in his native
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language
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adds
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In conclusion
, although
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resourceful
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, at best
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learnt at
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exercise caution in ensuring it does not replace indigenous
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language
which can lead to cultural abandonment.
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IELTS essay Many environmental issues are the responsibility of rich nation not of poor nation Do you agree with this v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
392 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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