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Many employees may work at home with the modern technology. Some people claim that it can benefit only the workers and does not benefit employers at all. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Many employees may work at home with the modern technology. Some people claim that it can benefit only the workers and does not benefit employers at all. v. 2
Children are fragile beings, hence they should be nurtured with care. It is undoubtedly a challenging task to inculcate reading habits in them. This essay will discuss the reasons for this problem and further suggest some solutions to motivate them towards reading. A primary reason for this situation is because youngsters are attracted to fancy things. In other words, psychologically a child is attracted more to colourful equipment such as cartoon, toys, gadgets and so on. There by, their time and interest in studies is diluted. A survey, for instance, has reported that 90% of children watch television proactively till late nights, however, they tend to sleep early if they have to spend time to study. Indeed, children's focus is more on attractive things. Parents and Teachers can adopt certain effective measures to develop child's focus upon reading. If children are provided with attractive books, such as comics, which portray the characters as per their choice, they are bound to enjoy the activity. In 1995, In India, for example, there was a dramatic increase in sales from books as a monthly comic magazine, "The digest" took over the market. In this period, Children were addicted to reading this book as it, narrated stories as per their preference. Certainly, introducing fun in education can promote learning in younger age groups, who is attracted to attributes that amuse them. To conclude, although it is difficult to make children concentrate on reading, it is also, possibly to restate their attention towards this by introducing suitable ways to encourage them.
Children
are fragile beings,
hence
they should
be nurtured
with care. It is
undoubtedly
a challenging task to inculcate
reading
habits in them. This essay will discuss the reasons for this problem and
further
suggest
some
solutions to motivate them towards reading.

A primary reason for this situation is
because
youngsters
are attracted
to fancy things.
In other words
,
psychologically
a child
is attracted
more to
colourful
equipment such as cartoon, toys, gadgets and
so
on. There by, their time and interest in studies
is diluted
. A survey,
for instance
, has reported that 90% of
children
watch
television
proactively
till late nights,
however
, they tend to sleep early if they
have to
spend time to study.
Indeed
, children's focus is more on attractive things.

Parents and Teachers can adopt certain effective measures to develop child's focus upon
reading
. If
children
are provided
with attractive books, such as comics, which portray the characters as per their choice, they
are bound
to enjoy the activity. In 1995, In India,
for example
, there was a dramatic increase in sales from books as a monthly comic magazine,
"
The digest
"
took over the market. In this period,
Children
were addicted
to
reading
this book as it, narrated stories as per their preference.
Certainly
, introducing fun in education can promote learning in younger age groups, who
is attracted
to attributes that amuse them.

To conclude
, although it is difficult to
make
children
concentrate on
reading
, it is
also
,
possibly
to restate their attention towards this by introducing suitable ways to encourage them.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Many employees may work at home with the modern technology. Some people claim that it can benefit only the workers and does not benefit employers at all. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
256 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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