Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Many employees may work at home with the modern technology. some people claim that it can benefit only the workers, not the employers. Do you agree or disagree? v.1

Many employees may work at home with the modern technology. some people claim that it can benefit only the workers, not the employers. v. 1
The majority of people are considering the approach that governments should impose taxes on consumption of fossil fuels such oil, coil and gas to limit the use of these energy to some extent. However, whether about being efficient or not is controversial issue which appears to have a number of contradictory effects. We will consider the both sides of the discussion in this essay. On the one hand, those who support the taxation of fossil fuels, promote the idea that it is apparently available to operate an economic law, which means that the higher prices will lead to lower consumption, and thus reduce the supply of these energies as we are seeing in Sweden where this policy can be the most potential case, resulting some nations most responsible for this suitable tactic. Furthermore, proponents of fuel taxes are citing some evidence of practice organization founded by the government’s distribution, meaning that the fund raised by this type of taxes used to support the subsidized projects. An appropriate example of this can be seen in some company which aimed to distinguish recyclable and solar reactors, even biofuel. To the supporters, these arguments are convincing. Conversely, opponents of fuel taxes are capable to present some industry revolutionized countries such as Indonesia and Japan, where the tax-based system apparently cannot reduce the demand for fuels regardless of considering the overwhelming expenditure of oil and coil. Consequently, in this situation, people are claiming that the government have forced people to cost more for the same level of energy compared to non-added tax expense. In addition, the tax burden on least affordable consumers are appeared to be the penalized section. Another criticism is that the interfering government in competition of suppliers can be the significant factor to leave participants of this market. In conclusion, I would tend to side with the opponents of fuel taxation. It seems to be unreasonable to force vulnerable users to pay more for a commodity which is essential to them, without the real infrastructure of renewable energy. It would be more logical to improve the opportunity of overcoming by equitable price.
The majority of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are considering the approach that
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
governments
should impose
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
on consumption of fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
such oil, coil and gas to limit the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extent.
However
, whether about being efficient or not is controversial issue which appears to have a number of contradictory effects. We will consider the both sides of the discussion in this essay.

On the one hand, those who support the taxation of fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
, promote the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
that it is
apparently
available to operate an economic law, which means that the higher prices will lead to lower consumption, and
thus
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the supply of these
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energies
as we are seeing in Sweden where this policy can be the most potential case, resulting
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
nations most responsible for this suitable tactic.
Furthermore
, proponents of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
are citing
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
evidence of practice organization founded by the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government’s
distribution, meaning that the fund raised by this type of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to support the subsidized projects. An appropriate example of this can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
seen
in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
which aimed to distinguish recyclable and solar reactors, even biofuel. To the supporters, these arguments are convincing.

Conversely
, opponents of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
taxes
are capable to present
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
industry revolutionized countries such as Indonesia and Japan, where the tax-based system
apparently
cannot
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the demand for
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
regardless of considering the overwhelming expenditure of oil and coil.

Consequently
, in this situation,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
are claiming that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
have forced
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
to cost more for the same level of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
compared to non-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
added
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
expense.
In addition
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
tax
burden on least affordable consumers
are appeared
to be the penalized section. Another criticism is that the interfering
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
government
in competition of suppliers can be the significant factor to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
participants of this market.

In conclusion
, I would tend to side with the opponents of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
taxation. It seems to be unreasonable to force vulnerable users to pay more for a commodity which is essential to them, without the real infrastructure of renewable
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
energy
. It would be more logical to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
improve
the opportunity of overcoming by equitable price.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
We should learn languages because language is the only thing worth knowing even poorly.
Kató Lomb

IELTS essay Many employees may work at home with the modern technology. some people claim that it can benefit only the workers, not the employers. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
351 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts