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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v.2

Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 2
In recent years, the world has been faced with the issue of atmospheric deterioration. This a challenging problem is mostly caused by deforestation of plant life and the use of fossil fuel as a major source of energy. Solutions such as afforestation and the use of electricity and solar energy can replace the use of fossil fuel to produce clean and healthy air. Nowadays, modification of the environment in the form of development has altered the natural ecosystem. The process of plant respiration produces oxygen which is vital and essential to humans. Biological studies show that plants inhale our used gas, which is carbon dioxide and exhales oxygen. Therefore, logging of trees alters this environmental balance as there are not enough trees to give out oxygen. In addition, the use of fossil material as a major source of energy in the world has caused a tremendous decline in the environment. Fossil fuels such as diesel and petroleum are used by automobiles, aviation, and other industries. Consequently, these engines pollute the entire air with its product which is carbon dioxide, thus replacing the amount in circulation. The government has a role to play in ensuring there are clean and healthy surroundings by enacting legislation to control pollution as well as to regulate deforestation and encouraging the masses to imbibe the habit of planting a tree. Besides, automobile and aviation companies should manufacture engines that consume less fuel and produces less emission of CO in turn. The recent introduction of solar and cell-powered cars is a major step to curbing the problem of pollution in the atmosphere. In conclusion, with the political will towards deforestation and the use of battery and solar cars, the issue of environmental depletion will be taken care of. In addition, rarely do people realize the consequences of their actions, so they should try to tackle this problem.
In recent years, the world has
been faced
with the issue of atmospheric deterioration. This a challenging problem is
mostly
caused by deforestation of plant life and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
as a major source of energy. Solutions such as afforestation and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of electricity and solar energy can replace the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
to produce clean and healthy air.

Nowadays, modification of the environment in the form of development has altered the natural ecosystem. The process of plant respiration produces oxygen which is vital and essential to humans. Biological studies
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
that plants inhale our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
gas, which is carbon dioxide and exhales oxygen.
Therefore
, logging of trees alters this environmental balance as there are not
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
trees to give out oxygen.
In addition
, the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fossil
material as a major source of energy in the world has caused a tremendous decline in the environment.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Fossil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuels
such as diesel and petroleum are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by automobiles, aviation, and other industries.
Consequently
, these engines pollute the entire air with its product which is carbon dioxide,
thus
replacing the amount in circulation.

The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has a role to play in ensuring there are clean and healthy surroundings by enacting legislation to control pollution
as well
as to regulate deforestation and encouraging the masses to imbibe the habit of planting a tree.
Besides
, automobile and aviation
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
should manufacture engines that consume less
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fuel
and produces less emission of CO in turn. The recent introduction of solar and cell-powered cars is a major step to curbing the problem of pollution in the atmosphere.

In conclusion
, with the political will towards deforestation and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of battery and solar cars, the issue of environmental depletion will
be taken
care of.
In addition
, rarely do
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
realize the consequences of their actions,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
they should try to tackle this problem.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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