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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v.3

Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 3
Nowadays, environmental situation all around the world is deteriorating and the main reason for this is human activities. Nevertheless, country, activists and volunteers all around the world are making every endeavour to protect surrounding from destroying, their efforts are not enough, because individuals have the major role in achieving multilateral solutions to global problems. First of all, one of the biggest reasons for environmental pollution is exhaust gas that comes from the work of the plant and uncontrolled usage of automobile. The scale of the problem is related to the size of enterprise, source materials used, private cars and public transport, that relates to the burning of fossil fuel. Air pollution is one of the most dangerous factors for a person’s health, that related to the environment. Moreover, people can try to travel to work by busses and trains, which are abundant and not expensive. In addition to, enterprises are able to use air filters, that are cheap and efficient. The possible solution to mitigate this problem is efforts that each individual can make to save our surrounding. People can start from reducing the amount of plastic, that they use in everyday life. Instead of plastic bags in supermarkets, individuals can use paper or cloth bags. Start utilization trash, dividing it by plastic, bag, glass and et cetera. In conclusion, the damage of the environment is relevant right now, there are many activities that are aimed at the solution of this problem. However, the best way to solve it is each individual’s participation
Nowadays, environmental situation all around the world is deteriorating and the main reason for this is human activities.
Nevertheless
, country, activists and volunteers all around the world are making every
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endeavour
to protect surrounding from destroying, their efforts are not
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enough
,
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because
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individuals
have the major role in achieving multilateral solutions to global problems.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, one of the biggest reasons for environmental pollution is exhaust gas that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
from the work of the plant and uncontrolled usage of automobile. The scale of the problem
is related
to the size of enterprise, source materials
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
, private cars and public transport, that relates to the burning of fossil fuel. Air pollution is one of the most
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dangerous
factors for a person’s health, that related to the environment.
Moreover
,
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people
can try to travel to work by busses and trains, which are abundant and not expensive.
In addition
to, enterprises are able to
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use
air filters, that are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
and efficient.

The possible solution to mitigate this problem is efforts that each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
to save our surrounding.
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People
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
from reducing the amount of plastic, that they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
in everyday life.
Instead
of plastic bags in supermarkets,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individuals
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
paper or cloth bags.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Start
utilization trash, dividing it by plastic, bag, glass and
Possible spelling mistake found.
et cetera
.

In conclusion
, the
The usual collocation for word "damage" is "to" not "of." Revise: "damage to".
damage of
the environment is relevant right
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now
, there are
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many
activities that
are aimed
at the solution of this problem.
However
, the best way to solve it is each
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual’s
participation
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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