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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v.4

Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 4
Environmental concerns around the globe are rapidly growing. Although some environmental analysts are suggesting ways to counter the problems, no improvements are observed. This essay will discuss some reasons why this is happening and suggest some effective solutions to resolve these issues. Over the last few decades, the ministry of environmental affairs has made some policies to combat the climate change. However, the efforts put by them have not shown any significant changes. One of the reasons for this occurrence is the lack knowledge to understand the current environmental conditions and its negative impacts on the human race. A survey by a group of environmental scientists showed that many African people throw way the rubbish into rivers, and the poisonous elements that they put into lakes and rivers are consumed by many other people around them for drinking and domestic activities, and they could be vulnerable to many deadly diseases such as SARS. Moreover, some politicians do not take the climate change seriously. Since the country’s success rate is measured by the economical progression, funds are being allotted to build industries and manufacturing units, which throw away a high percentage of green gases into the atmosphere. Although there are strict laws in place, corrupt politicians use veto power to break the rules. One of the possible solutions could be revisit to the education system. The Authorities could introduce a new environmental subject into the academic syllabus to ensure young people understand the climate and the consequences if abused. Another solution would be selecting the educated politicians who could mitigate the environmental issues and motivate people to obey the rules set. In conclusion, many methods to improve the environment have been introduced by the state, but the desired results are not seen. The reasons are many, however, solutions such as encouraging people to understand the climatic changes and its effects could result in some positive changes in the future.
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Environmental
concerns around the globe are
rapidly
growing. Although
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some
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environmental
analysts are suggesting ways to counter the problems, no improvements
are observed
. This essay will discuss
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some
reasons why this is happening and suggest
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some
effective
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solutions
to resolve these issues.

Over the last few decades, the ministry of
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environmental
affairs has made
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some
policies to combat the climate
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change
.
However
, the efforts put by them have not shown any significant
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changes
. One of the reasons for this occurrence is the lack knowledge to understand the
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current
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environmental
conditions and its
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negative
impacts on the human race. A survey by a group of
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environmental
scientists
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showed
that
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many
African
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people
throw way the rubbish into rivers, and the poisonous elements that they put into lakes and rivers
are consumed
by
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many
other
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people
around them for drinking and domestic activities, and they could be vulnerable to
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many
deadly diseases such as SARS.

Moreover
,
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some
politicians do not take the climate
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change
seriously
. Since the country’s success rate
is measured
by the economical progression, funds are
being allotted
to build industries and manufacturing units, which throw away a high percentage of green gases into the atmosphere. Although there are strict laws in place, corrupt politicians
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use
veto power to break the
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rules
.

One of the possible
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solutions
could be
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revisit
to the education system. The Authorities could introduce a new
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environmental
subject into the academic syllabus to ensure young
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people
understand the climate and the consequences if abused. Another
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solution
would be selecting the educated politicians who could mitigate the
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environmental
issues and motivate
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people
to obey the
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rules
set.

In conclusion
,
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many
methods to
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improve
the environment have
been introduced
by the state,
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but
the desired results are not
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seen
. The reasons are
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many
,
however
,
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solutions
such as encouraging
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people
to understand the climatic
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changes
and its effects could result in
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some
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positive
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changes
in the future.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 4

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
318 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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