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Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v.5

Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 5
The damage to the environment is increasing at an alarming rate mainly due to human activities. Even though a great deal of effort is now being made by governments all over the world, individuals also have a major role to play in the minimizing global environmental hazard. To begin with, one of the major reasons for the pollution of the environment is the uncontrolled use of automobiles. If individuals can make a conscious effort to change their lifestyle, by cutting down the utilization of private cars and use public transport, it would substantially reduce the burning of fossil fuels. In other words, serious attempt could be made by individuals to travel to work regularly by buses and trains, which are cheap and abundant. Hence, Individual perceptive towards using these transports could help in the reduction of emissions produced by vehicles, and thereby playing a vital role in addressing this issue. The possible solution to mitigate this problem is in each and individual person could play a significant role to save our environment by not using enormous amount of plastic in daily life, which is a hazardous pollutant of the soil. In other words, almost every consumer use plastics while doing shopping, and there is always use and throw culture. Instead of using this, Individual efforts could be taken into account, opting for Eco friendly substitutes. For example, people can use paper and cloth bags instead of biodegradable plastic in supermarkets. So, the utilization of plastics on the environment is devastating, and must find alternatives to plastic from the individual perceptive. In conclusion, it seems to me that environmental problem is the worrying concern and one's have a crucial role in joining hands with the government in reducing the harm caused to the environment. Lack of individual participation could mean that addressing environmental issue is beyond reach.
The damage to the
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environment
is increasing at an alarming rate
mainly
due to human activities.
Even though
a great deal of effort is
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now
being made
by
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governments
all over the world,
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individuals
also
have a major
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role
to play in the minimizing global environmental hazard.

To
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begin
with, one of the major reasons for the pollution of the
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environment
is the uncontrolled
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
of automobiles. If
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individuals
can
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make
a conscious effort to
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change
their lifestyle, by cutting down the utilization of private cars and
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use
public transport, it would
substantially
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reduce
the burning of fossil fuels.
In other words
, serious attempt could
be made
by
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individuals
to travel to work
regularly
by buses and trains, which are
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cheap
and abundant.
Hence
,
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Individual
perceptive towards using these transports could
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help
in the reduction of emissions produced by vehicles, and thereby playing a vital
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role
in addressing this issue.

The possible solution to mitigate this problem is in each and
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individual
person could play a significant
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role
to save our
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environment
by not using enormous amount of
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plastic
in daily life, which is a hazardous pollutant of the soil.
In other words
, almost every consumer
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
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plastics
while
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "going shopping".
doing shopping
, and there is always
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use
and throw culture.
Instead
of using this,
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Individual
efforts could
be taken
into account, opting for Eco friendly substitutes.
For example
,
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people
can
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use
paper and cloth bags
instead
of biodegradable
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plastic
in supermarkets.
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So
, the utilization of
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plastics
on the
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environment
is devastating, and
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must
find alternatives to
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plastic
from the
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individual
perceptive.

In conclusion
, it seems to me that environmental problem is the worrying concern and one's have a crucial
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role
in joining hands with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
in reducing the harm caused to the
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environment
. Lack of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
individual
participation could mean that addressing environmental issue is beyond reach.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many efforts have been made by countries to address challenges concerning the environment but the situation has not improved. What are the possible reasons for environmental degradation? Are there any solutions to combat this problem? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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