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A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.7

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 7
In today's era, some group of members in society are using animals for their personal benefits like killing for offering to god and also for medical inventions. But the other part of the society members condemns this and suggest to treat them equal to human beings. I strongly admit and stand with the opinion of treating every creature on earth as a human being. This essay would discuss both the views in detail. Majority of the people using animals for food preparation, as 80% of the people across the world are non vegetarians. All the restraunts and food courts are the top users of animals. Moreover, animals are used for medical inventions & practices. For example, some parts of the dog are used for producing the insulin medicine which is used for treating the diabates in human beings. Also, newly invented medicines are applied on animals to test whether they sustain or not for high dosages. However, there are other part of the society members, who seriously deny this. They believe that government should encourage researchers to identify the alternative methodologies to not to use the animal creatures. For example, enterprenuers to invent technologies that creates robot based DNA structures as like animals so that the animal extinction can be reduced. Also, in parallel awareness campaigns to be introduced to highlight the benefits of vegetarian food. In conclusion, it is important that the medical research is undoubtedly required to keep the world healthy. However, people should be mindfull of the fact that animals also have the equal rights as human beings.
In
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today
's era,
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some
group of members in society are using
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animals
for their personal benefits like killing for offering to god and
also
for medical inventions.
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But
the other part of the society members condemns this and
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suggest to treat
them equal to
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human
beings. I
strongly
admit and stand with the opinion of treating every creature on earth as a
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human
being. This essay would discuss both the views in detail.

Majority of the
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people
using
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animals
for food preparation, as 80% of the
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people
across the world are non vegetarians. All the
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restraunts
and food courts are the top users of
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animals
.
Moreover
,
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animals
are
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used
for medical inventions & practices.
For example
,
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some
parts of the dog are
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used
for producing the insulin medicine which is
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used
for treating the
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diabates
in
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human
beings.
Also
,
newly
invented medicines
are applied
on
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animals
to
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test
whether they sustain or not for high dosages.

However
, there are other part of the society members, who
seriously
deny this. They believe that
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government
should encourage researchers to identify the alternative methodologies
One 'to' seems to be obsolete.
to not to
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use
the
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animal
creatures.
For example
,
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enterprenuers
to invent technologies that creates robot based DNA structures as like
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animals
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so
that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
animal
extinction can be
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reduced
.
Also
, in parallel awareness campaigns to
be introduced
to highlight the benefits of vegetarian food.

In conclusion
, it is
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important
that the medical research is
undoubtedly
required to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
the world healthy.
However
,
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people
should be
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mindfull
of the fact that
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animals
also
have the equal rights as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
human
beings.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS essay A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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