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Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest? v.5

Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest? v. 5
It is often experienced that many incidents have taken place where after finishing their prison sentence many perpetrators again take same path and do further crimes. And government should take strict action to take this to end. This essay is intended to discuss why this type of phenomena happens and possible solution to solutions. To commence with, criminals are in the jails, because we want to make this world crime free, but one day or another their punishment will be over and they will hit back similarly. Sometimes they do it again because of their mental illness or habitually or may be because of possession. However, there are some common and treatable reasons. Firstly, this happens because when they get out of the donjons as a normal human they have to find work for livings and to accomplish their needs, but because of spoiled reputation most of the time they do not be able to get job. And i think that could make that person to take that path again unwantedly. Moreover, to get rid of this kind of issues taking action, while they are in the jail, can solve this problem to some extent. Likewise, giving them training for some minor labor work, when they are going through the period of imprisonment. Giving them little introspection training like for instance, in some Indian jails some time they arrange special type of life enhancement classes like personality development, moral values and meditation by Dharma Gurus to be a good member of society. Apart from that, government can give special status shows good work in donjons. Basically, they can sort them out in rankings by their work and clear their criminal record. to conclude, to solve the problem of crime again by same criminals after bail. We have to change our thoughts about the person who just finished his statement, and accept them as a ordinary man. And by government giving them good and clear status they would be able to find jobs and will never think of coming that way again.
It is
often
experienced that
many
incidents have taken place where after finishing their prison sentence
many
perpetrators
again
take same path and do
further
crimes. And
government
should take strict action to take this to
end
. This essay
is intended
to discuss why this type of phenomena happens and possible solution to solutions.

To commence with, criminals are in the jails,
because
we want to
make
this world crime free,
but
one day or
another their punishment
will be
over and
they will hit back
similarly
.
Sometimes
they do it
again
because
of their mental illness or
habitually
or may be
because
of possession.
However
, there are
some
common and treatable reasons.
Firstly
, this happens
because
when they
get
out of the
donjons
as a normal human they
have to
find
work
for livings and to accomplish their needs,
but
because
of spoiled reputation most of the time they do not be able to
get
job. And
i
think
that could
make
that person to take that path
again
unwantedly
.

Moreover
, to
get
rid of this kind of issues taking action, while they are in the jail, can solve this problem to
some
extent.
Likewise
, giving them training for
some
minor labor
work
, when they are going through the period of imprisonment. Giving them
little
introspection training like
for instance
, in
some
Indian jails
some
time they arrange special type of life enhancement classes like personality development, moral values and meditation by Dharma Gurus to be a
good
member of society. Apart from that,
government
can give special status
shows
good
work
in
donjons
.
Basically
, they can sort them out in rankings by their
work
and
clear
their criminal record.

to
conclude, to solve the problem of crime
again
by same criminals after bail. We
have to
change
our thoughts about the person who
just
finished his statement, and accept them as
a
ordinary
man
. And by
government
giving them
good
and
clear
status they would be able to find jobs and will never
think
of coming that way
again
.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Many criminals commit further crimes as soon as they are released from prison. What do you think are the causes of this? What possible solutions can you suggest? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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