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Is it more important to be able to work alone or with group of people on a team or to work independently! Use reasons and specific example to support your choice v.2

Is it more important to be able to work alone or with group of people on a team or to work independently! Use reasons and specific example to support your choice v. 2
Society is comprises of diffrent people. To live in society it is important that we should able to co-operate with each other. Some people' s think that it is better to work independently while others don' t think so. According to me, it is important to be able to work with a group of people on team for the following reasons. Working in team makes work more easy. When more people are involved in same work we get different approach for the same work. Responsibility of work is not dependent on individual person so team is ready to take difficult task. For example, when I was in last year of graduation, every team needs to complete there fianl year project. I had the team of three people and we had make project on topic of secure transmission images between sender and receiver. For me that topic was really terrifying because I was not good in that subject. While working on project we divide task to everyone and decided that will help each other whenever we got stuck. We worked individually on some and on some part we work together and this way we completed our project. If we wern' t working in team I wouldn' t have able to complete the project so working in tam makes task more plausible. Team work helps individual with opportunity for interaction and this interaction help individual to be better responsible citizen in society with his active interaction in society. For example, when I was in second year of my graduation, I worked as volunteer in oragnizing team. Our task was to oraginze the event in college. Working as a team memeber I get to know about the differnt views of other memebers. How to understand the feelings of others and how to resolve the conflicts between the team. This interaction in team memebr help to realize that same things apply to every individual. I started participate in social club to provide eduation for poor children. If it weren' t the team work I wouldn' t have been able to understand my responsibility. In sum, it is more imporatant to be work with a group of people on team rather than to work independenmtly. Working in team make taks more achieveable and helps to understand their responsibilities.
Society is
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comprises of
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diffrent
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people
. To
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live
in society it
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is


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important
that we should
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able
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Some


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people&
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think
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work
independently
while others

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don&
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think
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so
.
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, it is
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important
to be
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able
to
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work


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with
a group of
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people
on
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team
for the following reasons.

Working in
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team
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makes
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work
more easy. When more
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people
are involved
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in


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same
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work
we
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get
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different
approach for the same
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work
. Responsibility

of
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work
is not dependent on
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individual
person
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so
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team
is ready to take

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difficult
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task
.
For example
, when I was in last year of graduation,

every
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team
needs to complete there
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fianl
year
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project
. I had the
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team


of three
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people and
we had
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make
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project
on topic of secure transmission

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images
between sender and receiver. For me that topic was
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really


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terrifying
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because
I was not
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good
in that subject. While
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working
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on


project we divide
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task
to everyone and decided that will
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help
each

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other
whenever we
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got
stuck. We worked
individually
on
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some
and on
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some


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part
we
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work
together and this way we completed our
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project
. If
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we


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wern&
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working
in
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team
I
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wouldn&
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able
to complete the
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project
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working
in tam
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makes
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task
more plausible.

Team
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work
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helps
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individual
with opportunity for interaction and this

interaction
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help
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individual
to be better responsible citizen in society

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with
his active interaction in society.
For example
, when I was
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in


second year of my graduation, I worked as volunteer in
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oragnizing


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team
. Our
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task
was to
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oraginze
the
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event
in college.
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as a
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team


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memeber
I
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get
to know about the
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differnt
views of other
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memebers
. How

to understand the feelings of others and how to resolve the conflicts

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between
the
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team
. This interaction in
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team
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memebr
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help
to realize
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that


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same
things apply to every
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individual
. I
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started
participate in
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social


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club
to provide
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eduation
for poor children. If it
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weren&
#039; t the
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team
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work


I
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wouldn&
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able
to understand my responsibility.

In sum, it is more
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imporatant
to be
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work
with a group of
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people
on team

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rather
than to
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work
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independenmtly
.
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Working
in
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team
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make
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taks
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more


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achieveable
and
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helps
to understand their responsibilities.
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
52Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
53Mistakes

IELTS essay Is it more important to be able to work alone or with group of people on a team or to work independently! Use reasons and specific example to support your choice v. 2

Essay
  American English
32 paragraphs
383 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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