Many people believe there is no need for countries to spend large sum of money to support athletes join in international competitions. And the money could cause better result if be used in encouraging kids to exercise. While some other people disagree. This essay will discuss both view.
No one would deny the importance of winning in international competitions for a country. Trophy is not only the honor for athletes but also show how powerful a country is. That is the main reason for why many countries are willing to invest athletes to attain famous competitions such Olympic Games or world football match. Moreover, the victory in sports game can raise a strong self-confidence in domestic. For instance, Chinese athletes seldom lose in table tennis match around the world, and therefore Chinese people have a strong confidence in this sport. Finally, when watching sports competition which domestic athletes attained, audiences will have more possibility to exercise later. This can also help citizens to stay healthy.
However, people who advocate that government should put money to encourage children to doing sport is also reasonable. First and foremost, children are the hope for a country. So to make next generation have strong and healthy body is a significant goal in education process. Instead of wasting money in few athletes, to increase sports facilities and attract kids to playing sports will bring more benefits, since children may be more healthy and energetic by exercise. Moreover, sports game such as basketball and soccer can cultivate a sense of cooperation within teenagers. It can help them finish team work better in future study or career.
In conclusion, I believe both are important toward countries. But since teenagers are hope for countries, give them a better base of life will be more necessary for countries.
Many
people
believe there is no need for
countries
to spend large sum of
money
to support
athletes
join
in international
competitions
. And the
money
could cause better result if be
used
in encouraging kids to exercise. While
some
other
people
disagree. This essay will discuss both view.
No one would deny the importance of winning in international
competitions
for a
country
. Trophy is not
only
the honor for
athletes
but
also
show
how powerful a
country
is.
That is
the main reason for why
many
countries
are willing to invest
athletes
to attain
famous
competitions
such Olympic Games or world football match.
Moreover
, the victory in
sports
game can raise a strong self-confidence in domestic.
For instance
, Chinese
athletes
seldom lose in table tennis match around the world, and
therefore
Chinese
people
have a strong confidence in this
sport
.
Finally
, when watching
sports
competition
which domestic
athletes
attained, audiences will have more possibility to exercise later. This can
also
help
citizens to stay healthy.
However
,
people
who advocate that
government
should put
money
to encourage children to
doing
sport
is
also
reasonable.
First
and foremost, children are the hope for a
country
.
So
to
make
next
generation have strong and healthy body is a significant goal in education process.
Instead
of wasting
money
in few
athletes
, to increase
sports
facilities and attract kids to playing
sports
will bring more benefits, since children may be more healthy and energetic by exercise.
Moreover
,
sports
game such as basketball and soccer can cultivate a sense of cooperation within
teenagers
. It can
help
them finish team work better in future study or career.
In conclusion
, I believe both are
important
toward
countries
.
But
since
teenagers
are hope for
countries
, give them a better base of life will be more necessary for
countries
.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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