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Due to the coronavirus all schools have been closed making both students and teachers use electronic devices to study online What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend Write an essay of at least 250 words to support your arguments v.2

Due to the coronavirus all schools have been closed making both students and teachers use electronic devices to study online What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend Write an essay of at least 250 words to support your arguments v. 2
Today, while Coronavirus is declared a Global Health Emergency, school closures are naturally unavoidable. This educational issue has led to soaring demand for interactive apps in electronic devices to learn online. In my point of view, it is undeniable that this trend will create several benefits but there will be some drawbacks as well. On the one hand, the greatest advantage is able to enhance the ability of self-study. It is of significant, which is a useful learning method which plays a major role in expanding knowledge. For instance, a large number of students will be strongly motivated to study due to encouraging their curiosity. In addition, what makes this crucial is the student’s comfort. They would not feel fully strained because of sitting in front of their teacher, they can learn in their favorite place with a bright and pleasant feelings. Therefore, it is still possible for learners to keep their learning pace without attending school. On the other hand, a negative aspect of this is the lack of discipline. It seems that some students need to be strictly supervised, thus this way would not be useful for them. They may play games, read books or eat, so on while learning so the quality of that might be reduced. Another minus point for this is about the teachers. It seems that they may isolate some quiet students in the class, only by studying with a phone can those teachers get in touch with all the learners. I think that it is quite difficult and nearly impossible for them. In conclusion, every coin has its two sides so does learning online. Despite a few drawbacks that still exists, I strongly believe that it is still more beneficial than harmful.
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Today
, while Coronavirus
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a Global Health Emergency, school closures are
naturally
unavoidable. This educational issue has led to soaring demand for interactive apps in electronic devices to learn online. In my point of view, it is undeniable that this trend will create several benefits
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there will be
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some
drawbacks
as well
.

On the one hand, the greatest advantage is able to enhance the ability of self-study. It is of significant, which is a useful
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learning
method which plays a major role in expanding knowledge.
For instance
,
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a large number of
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students
will be
strongly
motivated to study due to encouraging their curiosity.
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, what
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makes
this crucial is the
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student’s
comfort. They would not feel
fully
strained
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because
of sitting in front of their teacher, they can learn in their favorite place with a bright and pleasant feelings.
Therefore
, it is
still
possible for learners to
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keep
their
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learning
pace without attending school.

On the other hand
, a
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negative
aspect of this is the lack of discipline. It seems that
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students
need to be
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supervised,
thus
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learning
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the quality of that might be
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reduced
. Another minus point for this is about the teachers. It seems that they may isolate
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some
quiet
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students
in the
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,
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only
by studying with a phone can those teachers
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get
in touch with all the learners. I
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that it is quite difficult and
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In conclusion
, every coin has its two sides
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so
does
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learning
online. Despite a few drawbacks that
still
exists, I
strongly
believe that it is
still
more beneficial than harmful.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Due to the coronavirus all schools have been closed making both students and teachers use electronic devices to study online What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend Write an essay of at least 250 words to support your arguments v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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