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Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing. ” The advertisers hire people, buzzers, who personally promote (buzz) products to people they know or meet. The key part v.2

Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing. ” The advertisers hire people, buzzers, who personally promote (buzz) products to people they know or meet. The key part v. 2
The reading passage and the lecture both discuss the kinds of strategy that is used for advertizment by a company, Buzzing. In the reading part, the author mentions that buzzering make variety of problems in the society; in the listening part, however, the speaker who is a buzzer challenges what thauthor states and rebutes the reasons. To begin with, as mentioned in the article, the author sets forth that we expect true from people that speak with us and we should know whether a person is paid to give their opinion about the product or not. Nevertheless, in the listening part the speaker refutes the reasons asserting that the author probebly missleaded the point, a individual who is buzzering a good, he/she actually like the product and a company hire them based on this idea and they will tell us a truth and exact feeling about a product. There is no act on this like a actor who is paid to memorize lines and act for this. Therefor, you can trust to a buzzer. Secondly, the author points out that we might accept a buzzer, if we do not know them about a labale for a decvice and it may harm a consumer by the claims. Nonetheless, the speaker flatly contradicts the idea and contends that consummers ask a variety of question and they have to answer them to persuad them to buy a thing, asd if they do not ansswer them complitly, they might reject them. Finally, the author claims that it has negative effect on social interaction and relationship, because of the reducing trustworthy in society. In contrast, the lecturer is of the opinion that if a person love a product, for ecnstance, a cellfone device, they might advertize it and they speak based on experiment, hence they would be openly to the people.
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that is
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used
for
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advertizment
by a
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company
, Buzzing. In the reading part, the
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author
mentions that
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buzzering
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make
variety of problems in the society; in the listening part,
however
, the speaker who is a buzzer challenges what
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thauthor
states and
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rebutes
the reasons.

To
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begin
with, as mentioned in the article, the
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author
sets forth that we
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expect
true from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
that speak with
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us and
we should know whether a person
is paid
to give their opinion about the
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product
or not.
Nevertheless
, in the listening part the speaker refutes the reasons asserting that the
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author
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probebly
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missleaded
the point,
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a
individual who is
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buzzering
a
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good
, he/she actually like the
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product
and a
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company
hire them based on this
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idea and
they will
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tell
us a truth and exact feeling about a
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product
. There is no act on this like
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a
actor who
is paid
to memorize lines and act for this. Therefor, you can trust to a buzzer.

Secondly
, the
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author
points out that we might accept a buzzer, if we do not know them about a
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labale
for a
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decvice
and it may harm a consumer by the claims. Nonetheless, the speaker
flatly
contradicts the
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idea
and contends that
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consummers
ask a variety of
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question and
they
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have to
answer them to
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persuad
them to
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buy
a thing,
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asd
if they do not
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ansswer
them
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complitly
, they might reject them.

Finally
, the
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author
claims that it has
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negative
effect on social interaction and relationship,
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because
of the reducing trustworthy in society.
In contrast
, the lecturer is of the opinion that if a person
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love
a
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product
, for
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ecnstance
, a
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cellfone
device, they might
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advertize
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it and
they speak based on experiment,
hence
they would be
openly
to the
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people
.
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9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing. ” The advertisers hire people, buzzers, who personally promote (buzz) products to people they know or meet. The key part v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
306 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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