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Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing. ” The advertisers hire people, buzzers, who personally promote (buzz) products to people they know or meet. The key part v.1

Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing. ” The advertisers hire people, buzzers, who personally promote (buzz) products to people they know or meet. The key part v. 1
Nowadays news channels are reporting pessimistic news among the nation all the time. The tidings which are revealed to the media is related to wars, famines, accidents and offences. This essay will outline the purpose behind publishing negative news and also explain why it is essential to maintain the symmetry of news. A news channel is always ambitious for growing up the profit and try to attract the viewer's attention. First of all, they gain the huge amount of viewer attraction on their broadcasted information, depending on deplorable tiding. And also, they compete with other channel in the media industry, by increasing their TRP. Furthermore, they telecast live incidents such as catastrophe, border military issues, fire accidents and so on, that's why live broadcasting is more in demand. For example, recent accident on Tazrin fashion industry ignited by fire, which was in the capital of Bangladesh in Dhaka has been live-streamed in Somoy TV, thus, it has become viral among citizens. In addition, journalists always try to show enthusiasm and make a footage of irrelevant things, in order to rise the benefit of the journalism industry. This few instances can bolster the existing concept that some unethical TV channels are always working on itself to accomplish popularity and earn a vast amount of money. However, media are the source of acquiring knowledge about the world and current trends and they should sustain a balanced between either aspect of information. First and foremost, news channel can have a destructive impact on individual's mentality. And it is the fastest way to spread a significant message all over the world, because of, the available source. If this source does not contain the proper messages and publish miserable things, it will make people more depressed and filled with anxiety. For instance a recent research shows that by watching defeatist tidings all the time, a group of people around the world is suffering from oddity. Moreover, vulnerable news is influencing the preposterous minded people, as a result, crime rates began to rise. The government should implement some new rules for those unethical business magnets to publish the news with symmetry. To conclude, this essay discussed the reason of publishing bad news, although, it creates a bad impression among people, but it is necessary to be aware about all kinds of occurrence. In my opinion, such news are closely intertwined with the changes of an individual's lifestyle.
Nowadays
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news
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channels
are reporting pessimistic
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news
among the nation all the time. The tidings which
are revealed
to the media
is related
to wars, famines, accidents and
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offences
. This essay will outline the purpose behind publishing
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negative
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news
and
also
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explain
why it is essential to maintain the symmetry of news.

A
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news
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channel
is always ambitious for growing up the profit and try to attract the viewer's attention.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, they gain the huge amount of viewer attraction on their broadcasted information, depending on deplorable tiding. And
also
, they compete with other
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channel
in the media industry, by increasing their TRP.
Furthermore
, they telecast
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live
incidents such as catastrophe, border military issues, fire accidents and
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so
on, that's why
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live
broadcasting is more in demand.
For example
, recent accident on
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Tazrin
fashion industry ignited by fire, which was in the capital of Bangladesh in Dhaka has been
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live
-streamed in
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Somoy
TV,
thus
, it has become viral among citizens.
In addition
, journalists always try to
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show
enthusiasm and
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make
a footage of irrelevant things, in order to rise the benefit of the journalism industry. This few instances can bolster the existing concept that
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some
unethical TV
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channels
are always working on itself to accomplish popularity and earn a vast amount of money.

However
, media are the source of acquiring knowledge about the world and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
trends and
they should sustain a balanced between either aspect of information.
First
and foremost,
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news
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channel
can have a destructive impact on individual's mentality. And it is the fastest way to spread a significant message all over the world,
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because
of, the available source. If this source does not contain the proper messages and publish miserable things, it will
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make
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people
more depressed and filled with anxiety.
For instance
a recent research
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shows
that by watching defeatist tidings all the time, a group of
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people
around the world is suffering from oddity.
Moreover
, vulnerable
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news
is influencing the preposterous minded
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people
,
as a result
, crime rates began to rise. The
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government
should implement
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some
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new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
rules
for those unethical business magnets to publish the
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news
with symmetry.

To conclude
, this essay discussed the reason of publishing
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bad
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news
, although, it creates a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impression among
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people
,
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but
it is necessary to be aware about all kinds of occurrence. In my opinion, such
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news
are
closely
intertwined with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
changes
of an individual's lifestyle.
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IELTS essay Many consumers ignore commercial advertisements. In response, advertising companies have started using a new tactic, called “buzzing. ” The advertisers hire people, buzzers, who personally promote (buzz) products to people they know or meet. The key part v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
401 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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