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Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home for the company. And give your own opinion. v.2

Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home for the company. And give your own opinion. v. 2
Work from home is helpful in delivering work life balance to the employee, and also helps the company to get the work done. Nowadays, most of the employers are offering this option to their employees. In this essay, let us discuss the pros and cons of this arrangement. First of all, work from home is a great opportunity for parents having small kids. They can take care of their children and can decrease the career-life conflicts. There are various advantages of being worked from the house. For example, flexibility: employee can flexibly serve without any peer pressure, which subsequently cut down the stress and sequentially increase the imagination and which, result in the best output. Productivity skyrockets when working in an environment that has decreased distractions. Secondly, commuting in between workplace and shelter is expensive and time taking. Both of these can be saved with the concept of telecommuting. There will be a control over the income. Moreover, carbon footprints can be reduced. In addition, the health benefits of flexible tasks include greater ease fitting physical activity into your day and more leeway to eat healthier meals. On the other hand, the residence is filled with distractions. For example, spouse, kids, and pets are just a few of the things that make working from lodgings, a bad idea for many people which, can consecutively reduce the productivity. Recent surveys prove that, too many people want to endeavour from abode for the wrong reasons. They are basically seeking comfort and the chance to get away from being held accountable. However, there are situations in which data security or consumer protection concerns might prevent telecommuters from having full access. Furthermore, it is highly risky to hand over the company details to carry them, to the residence. There will be chances of misdeeds. To conclude, remote working is more than a blessing at times when there is a crisis in the community, which makes the travelling to the office difficult. There are positives and negatives for mobile working. In my opinion, working from home is a great idea of work-life balancing, where I can spend more time volunteering at my child’s school.
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from home is helpful in delivering
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work life
balance to the employee, and
also
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helps
the
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company
to
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get
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work
done. Nowadays, most of the employers are offering this option to their employees. In this essay,
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let
us discuss the pros and cons of this arrangement.

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First of all
,
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work
from home is a great opportunity for parents having
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small
kids. They can take care of their children and can decrease the career-life conflicts. There are various advantages of
being worked
from the
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house
.
For example
, flexibility: employee can
flexibly
serve without any peer pressure, which
subsequently
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cut
down the
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stress
and
sequentially
increase the imagination and which, result in the best output. Productivity skyrockets when
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working
in an environment that has decreased distractions.
Secondly
, commuting in between workplace and shelter is expensive and time taking. Both of these can
be saved
with the concept of telecommuting. There will be a control over the income.
Moreover
, carbon footprints can be
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reduced
.
In addition
, the health benefits of flexible tasks include greater
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ease
fitting physical activity into your day and more leeway to eat healthier meals.

On the other hand
, the residence
is filled
with distractions.
For example
, spouse, kids, and pets are
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just
a few of the things that
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make
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working
from lodgings, a
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bad
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idea
for
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many
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people
which, can
consecutively
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reduce
the productivity. Recent surveys prove that, too
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many
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people
want to
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endeavour
from abode for the
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wrong
reasons. They are
basically
seeking comfort and the chance to
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get
away from
being held
accountable.
However
, there are situations in which data security or consumer protection concerns might
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prevent
telecommuters from having full access.
Furthermore
, it is
highly
risky to hand over the
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company
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details
to carry them, to the residence. There will be chances of misdeeds.

To conclude
, remote
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working
is more than a blessing at times when there is a crisis in the community, which
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makes
the travelling to the office difficult. There are positives and negatives for mobile
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working
. In my opinion,
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working
from home is a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
of work-life balancing, where I can spend more time volunteering at my child’s school.
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IELTS essay Many companies offer their employees the opportunity to work from home. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of working from home for the company. And give your own opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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