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Many companies and organisations require their employees to wear uniform What kind of jobs require uniforms What are the disadvantages of wearing uniform to work v.2

Many companies and organisations require their employees to wear uniform What kind of jobs require uniforms What are the disadvantages of wearing uniform to work v. 2
A huge number of corporates are having their own attires, which is mandatory for all their employees. This trend is becoming popular among various types of work places. Although, wearing the uniform brings many benefits but the drawbacks of wearing the same dress everyday cannot be ignored. The prominent places where wearing uniform is compulsory are the organization which are serving the customers and where daily public dealing is required. For example; banks, grocery stores, restaurants and many others are the places where people keep on visiting. It is vital for them to wear the formal outfit, as it help the customer to identify the staff members and ask them for any help if required. Apart from this, uniform also mitigate the risk of fraudulent activities due to rush at the people. To exemplify, there are many incidence of faruds in bank, where thieves pretend as the staff member and misuse the customers money and cards by guiding them in wrong way. So uniform can save them for financial and reputation risk. As every coin has two sides, same is with this area, undoubtedly wearing uniform can help many firms to run their business in better way, but it brings numerous untoward repercussions for both employee and public. Firstly, wearing same outfit regularly makes the life of person bore and dull. Colors are the essential part of this beautiful world and uniform fill it only with single shade. Ultimately, this life style decrease the motivation of the workers and they all lack in performing well. Secondly, in many areas wearing particular type of clothes are considered as ill-mannered and are not accepted by the certain segment of society. For instance, female wear traditional costumes in India, and if they wear western attires, even though if it is uniform, people will avoid visiting that places. In conclusion, unequivocally these uniforms is becoming the part of enormous companies and gaining popularity among some area of work, but it is irrefutable that it brings negative effects on the social and personal life of individuals.
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corporates
are having their
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attires, which is mandatory for all their employees. This trend is becoming popular among various types of work places. Although, wearing the
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uniform
brings
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many
benefits
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but
the drawbacks of wearing the same dress
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everyday
cannot be
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ignored
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The prominent places where wearing
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uniform
is compulsory are the organization which are serving the customers and where daily public dealing
is required
.
For example
; banks, grocery stores, restaurants and
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many
others are the places where
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people
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keep
on visiting. It is vital for them to wear the formal outfit, as it
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help
the customer to identify the staff members and ask them for any
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help
if required. Apart from this,
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uniform
also
mitigate the
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risk
of fraudulent activities due to rush at the
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people
. To exemplify, there are
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many
incidence of
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faruds
in bank, where thieves pretend as the staff member and misuse the customers money and cards by guiding them in
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wrong
way.
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So
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uniform
can save them for financial and reputation
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risk
.

As every coin has two sides, same is with this area,
undoubtedly
wearing
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uniform
can
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help
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many
firms to run their business in better way,
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but
it brings numerous untoward repercussions for both employee and public.
Firstly
, wearing same outfit
regularly
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makes
the life of person bore and dull. Colors are the essential part of this
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beautiful
world and
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uniform
fill it
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only
with single shade.
Ultimately
, this life style decrease the motivation of the
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workers and
they all lack in performing well.
Secondly
, in
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many
areas wearing particular type of clothes
are considered
as ill-mannered and are not
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accepted
by the certain segment of society.
For instance
, female wear traditional costumes in India, and if they wear western attires,
even though
if it is
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uniform
,
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people
will avoid visiting that places.

In conclusion
,
unequivocally
these
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uniforms
is becoming the part of enormous
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companies
and gaining popularity among
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some
area of work,
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but
it is irrefutable that it brings
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negative
effects on the social and personal life of individuals.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many companies and organisations require their employees to wear uniform What kind of jobs require uniforms What are the disadvantages of wearing uniform to work v. 2

Essay
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4 paragraphs
341 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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